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The bar graph below depicts the outcome of a research in UK for the year 2005 on the housing preferences by British population.

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The bar graph below depicts the outcome of a research in UK for the year 2005 on the housing preferences by British population.
The bar chart provides information about the proportions of five housing preferences in the United Kingdom across three populations during 2005.
Overall
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, whilst the housing preferences exhibited varying patterns over the given groups, some,
such
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 as flats and detached
houses
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, had the highest figures,
whereas
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 others, terraced and semi-detached
houses
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, registered the lowest share. As the chart illustrates, the flat model experienced high gaps among the people, almost 58% from
London
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,
whereas
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 29% individuals from Oxford and around 20% votes from
Cambridge
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.
London
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 outnumbered other areas only in
this
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 model. The majority of individuals who prefer detached
houses
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 were from
Cambridge
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, accounting for 35% , and Oxford registered 25%
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with a small percentage of
London
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 at nearly 8%. People from
Cambridge
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 prefer it more than the others.
On the other hand
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, the semi-detached
houses
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 category noticed a similarity between Oxford and
Cambridge
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 at approximately 25%,
whereas
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London
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 constituted roughly 18%.
Finally
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, Terraced
houses
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 showed minor gaps among populations at almost 27%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words houses, london, cambridge with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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