You are studying at a college which has very limited sports and leisure facilities for students. Write a letter to the principal. In your letter: Outline the situation Propose ways to improve this situation Request a meeting to discuss this

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Dear Sir , I am writing to talk about the limited
sports
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and leisure facilities at our
college
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. At the moment, our
college
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does not have many places for students to play
sports
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or relax. There are not enough
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courts, and there is no good gym.
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, students have few activities to do after classes.
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is not good for their health and free time. I think the
college
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should build more
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facilities.
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, we could have basketball and badminton courts. It would
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be useful to have a small gym with some basic equipment.
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, the
college
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could organise
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clubs for students. I would like to have a meeting with you to discuss
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problem and my suggestions. I hope we can find some good solutions together. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Nhu y

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Give a little more detail about the problem. For example, say how many courts there are now, or why the lack of space affects students.
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Make your meeting request more clear by asking for a day or time to meet.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter is easy to follow. To make the links even better, use words such as “also”, “because”, and “as a result” in more places.
coherence and cohesion
The ending is polite, but use “Yours faithfully” when you do not know the principal’s name, and check the space before the comma in “Dear Sir,”.
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You cover all the main parts: the problem, ways to make it better, and a request for a meeting.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has clear paragraphs, and each paragraph has one main idea. This makes it easy to read.
coherence and cohesion
The start and end are polite and right for a letter to a principal.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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