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The bar chart below shows Scotland’s exports to the rest of the UK and the rest of the world for the year 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where necessary.

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The bar chart below shows Scotland’s exports to the rest of the UK and the rest of the world for the year 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where necessary.
The bar chart provides information about the export of Scotland to either the United Kingdom or around the world in nine different industries during 2014.
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, whilst these industries exhibited various patterns over the given destinations, some,
such
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 as business services and Chemicals registered the highest revenues,
whereas
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 others, like other services and agriculture, recorded the lowest share. As the chart illustrates, the field of services of other
countries
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 represents the majority of exports at 13.8
billion
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,
while
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 the
UK
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 is far lower, achieving 1.7
billion
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. Chemical and mineral products
also
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 had a great value, accounting for 9.5
billion
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 generated from different
countries
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,
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 meanwhile, the
UK
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 was still lower at 5
billion
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. All
countries
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 except the
UK
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 provided 8.2
billion
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 from wholesale and retail , compared with merely 1.1
billion
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 from the United Kingdom.
On the other hand
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, both the
UK
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 and other
countries
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 registered the lowest shares at 0.9 and 3
billion
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 ,respectively. The fields like agriculture and fishing constituted 2.4 for other
countries
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 against 0.6 for the United Kingdom. There is a field including materials and transport equipment that showed a similarity, where it valued 2.7
billion
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 for the ROW and 2.1
billion
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 for the
UK
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.

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