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Band 5.5

People in your area are having problems with their internet connection. Write a letter to the company which provides the connection. In your letter, describe the problems explain how it is affecting people say what the company should do to help You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing a letter to express my disappointment with the service we are getting from your company
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 two weeks. In the past, there were no issues, but since the new optic fibre cables have been installed, we are facing a decrease in the speed of the internet. These days , the internet has become a part of life, and everything ranging from education to daily household tasks is dependent on it. People in my area are facing lots of issues in their daily lives
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 situation. It has become difficult for kids to do their studies, and the remote workers are facing difficulty fulfilling their professional commitments. The folks who used to order their food online
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 now have to visit restaurants physically, and some of these are elders
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 who face severe health ailments
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they have to travel for their basic needs.
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 should look for the faulty cables in our area and
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good ones. I hope
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 problem will be solved soon. Yours truly,

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task response
You cover all parts of the task: the problem, its effect on people, and what the company should do. Add a few clear facts, such as how often the internet stops or how slow it is, to make the letter stronger.
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Use a more direct request near the end. For example, ask the company to send a worker to check the new cables and tell people when the work will be done.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear order: reason for writing, problems, effects, and request. Keep this clear plan in future letters.
coherence and cohesion
Some long sentences have too many ideas. Break them into shorter sentences, especially the part about food orders and older people, so the meaning is easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
The closing needs your name after “Yours truly,”. Also, use “The company should” or “Your company should”, not only “Company should”.
task response
You give useful real-life examples, such as children studying, people working from home, and older people who need online food orders.
coherence and cohesion
Each main paragraph has a clear job, and the link from the internet problem to its effect on daily life is easy to understand.
The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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