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You live in an English speaking country and you want to do some voluntary, unpaid work in a developing country. Write a letter to a company called Cultural Expeditions, which organizes such trips. In your letter: Explain why you want to do the voluntary work. State what your skills and experience are. Indicate where you would like to volunteer and for how long.

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Respected Sir/Mam Hope
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 letter finds you well . My name is Navdeep Bajaj
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 I am writing
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 letter to inform you that
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last day
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 my friend told me that your organisation named Cultural Expeditions going to organise trips where
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 can get experience about voluntary
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 just moved to
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 weeks ago
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 opportunity is valuable to meet new
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 around me and
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 my skills and talent. As I am
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 engineer by Profession so i can contribute my skills in
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 as I have
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years
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 industry.
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 I am on summer vocations so I can give 4 hours every day for
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 as today is 01
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 2026
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 I can work until 15
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 2026 every day from 09:00am -01:00pm .
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 forward to hear about you
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 a positive response. thankyou with regards Navdeep

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Give a clear reason for helping, such as helping poor people or using your work skills to make homes safer. Say why this work matters to you.
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State a place where you want to work. You can name a country, town, or kind of area, such as a small village in India.
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Your skills and work history are clear. Add what jobs you can do there, for example, help plan, build, or check homes and schools.
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Make the time clear. “For ten days, from 1 March to 15 March” does not match. Also, say if you can work full time, as trips may need more than four hours a day.
coherence and cohesion
Use a clear letter plan: reason for writing, why you want to help, skills and work history, then place and time.
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Keep each part on one main point. The first part is too long and has many ideas. Split it into shorter parts.
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Use a more formal start and end. Write “Dear Sir or Madam,” and end with “Yours faithfully,” followed by your name.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words such as “Also”, “Because”, and “For this reason”. Avoid “Furthermore” when the next part is only about dates and hours.
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You give useful details about your job as a civil engineer and your seven years of work.
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You say how long you are free and give clear daily work hours.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has separate parts for your reason, skills, and free time.
coherence and cohesion
You use a polite ending and a friendly opening.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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