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THE FOUR CHARTS ILLUSTRATE THE PURPOSES OF TRAVEL TO THE UK VIA DIFFERENT AIRPORTS IN 2016.

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THE FOUR CHARTS ILLUSTRATE THE PURPOSES OF TRAVEL TO THE UK VIA DIFFERENT AIRPORTS IN 2016.
The pie charts depict the percentages of different purposes of people who travelled to the UK through
four
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 different
airports
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 in 2016.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the figure for visiting
friends
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/family represented a large proportion among the
four
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categories
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 (visiting
friends
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/family, holiday, business, and other) in all
four
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 different
airports
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 (Gatwick, Heathrow, Luton, and Stansted
Airport
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). Meanwhile, the ratio for
other
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the other
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was
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category was
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 recorded as the lowest among the
four
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categories
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 in the
four
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airports
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. Looking first at Gatwick
Airport
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, holiday held the highest percentage among the
four
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categories
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, accounting for 54%,
while
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 visiting
friends
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/family, business, and other were recorded at below 35%.
Furthermore
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, the figure for visiting
friends
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/family in Heathrow
Airport
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 was listed at 36%,
while
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 the remaining
categories
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 stood at below 33%. Moving to Luton
Airport
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, visiting
friends
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/family accounted for 50%, standing as the highest proportion among the
four
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 purposes
as well as
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 the
four
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airports
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,
while
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 the other purposes were only recorded at below 36%.
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, the ratio for visiting
friends
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/family in Stansted
Airport
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 stood at 48%. The rest was only below 40%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words four, airports, friends, categories, airport with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 3 times.
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