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The pie charts show the results of a survey in which undergraduates and postgraduates were asked about the range of books and non-printed materials in their school library. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pie charts show the results of a survey in which undergraduates and postgraduates were asked about the range of books and non-printed materials in their school library. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The four pie charts compare the proportions of undergraduate and postgraduate students who were satisfied with the
range
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books
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 and
non-print
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materials
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 in their school library.
Overall
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, undergraduates accounted for the most prominent share of “very good” in both the
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books
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non-print
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materials
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,
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 the rate of “not good” experienced the smallest category.
However
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, postgraduate students became the most dominant proportion, representing two-thirds of the survey. Looking first at undergraduates, “Very good” at
non-print
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materials
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 was considered the largest category, at 68%, larger than
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 figure in the
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books
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, followed by “satisfaction” at 20%,
while
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 “not good” was just at 12%.
In contrast
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, the
range
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books
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 was just the same segment, the highest level of rate “very good” stood at 37%, continued to “satisfaction”, at 35%, and the smallest proportion was “not good”, at 28%. Turning to postgraduate students, “Not good” became the most dominant share in both surveys, the
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books
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 and
non-print
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materials
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, accounting for 62%.
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, the percentages of “satisfaction” were just at a quarter of the segment, 22%, and 16% was at the “very good”.
On the other hand
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, “not good” instituted the largest survey, representing half of the category.
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 “very good” and “satisfaction” each made up at 22%, 28% respectively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words range, books, non-print, materials, “very, good”, “not, “satisfaction” with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 3 times.
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