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Write a letter to a friend who invited you to visit them in their country. Express your appreciation of the invitation Write the date of the visit Write about the things you want to do there

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Dear
sascha
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Sascha
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, How you
doin
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doin'
? It's been
long
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a long
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 time
we
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since we
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 havn't seen each other
but
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, but
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finally
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 we got
chance
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the chance
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 to meet . I
recieved
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received
 the invitation letter
and
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, and
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i 'm
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I'm
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 so glad that you invited me. I don't know how to express my excitement in words , but
i
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I
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 really
wants
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want
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 to appreciate that ,
inspite
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in spite
 of being long-distance
friends
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friends,
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 you still made efforts to invite me to your home country. I 'm landing at Delhi airport on
july
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July
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 15 and will be at your place on
very
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the very
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 next day. I always wanted to visit India and explore the different cultures and food.
Moreover
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 ,
i
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I
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 always wanted to experience the welcoming nature and
warmthness
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warmth
 of indians towards their guests. I 'm very excited to meet your family
specially
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, especially
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 Arnav. Sending him lots of love and best wishes for his new job. See you soon. Kind regards, Raj

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task response
You answer all parts: you say thank you, give the visit date, and talk about what you want to do. Add one or two clear plans with your friend, such as visiting a market or trying a meal.
task response
Use more natural word forms, for example: “I really want to thank you” instead of “I really wants to appreciate that.”
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear order: greeting, thanks, travel plans, and closing. This makes it easy to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Keep each paragraph on one main point. The first paragraph could only be about thanks, while the next one can be about your travel date and plans.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple links to join ideas, such as “also”, “because”, “so”, and “when I arrive”. Check small errors in dates, names, and capital letters.
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You clearly show that you are happy about the invite and excited about the visit.
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The date and place of arrival are clear: you will land in Delhi on July 15.
coherence and cohesion
The greeting and closing fit a friendly letter well.
coherence and cohesion
The final note about the friend’s family makes the letter warm and personal.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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