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The line graph below shows the changes in the share price of Outokumpu companies in euros between January 2006 and December 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line graph below shows the changes in the share price of Outokumpu companies in euros between January 2006 and December 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This
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 line graph illustrates the value of Outokumpu in
Euros
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 over a period of time between 2006 and 2010. In
general
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 the
stocke
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stock
 market
price
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 started at around 12
Euros
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 in 2006, and spiked in a short amount of time until it reached 31
Euros
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at around
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in
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 July 2006. In
2007
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2007,
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 the market
price
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 decreased slowly
only
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 to peak one more time in 2008, reaching 31
Euros
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.
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, after
that
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 the shares of Outokumpu experienced a sharp decline and bottomed at around 8
Euros
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. After they did hit rock bottom mid 2008 the
price
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 recovered a little bit and came by the end of the year back to 15
Euros
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. In 2009 and
2010
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2010,
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 the
price
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 was more stable at 11
Euros
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.
Overall
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,
allthough
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although
 the share values experienced two significant peaks during the period
.
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, he final
price
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 was only slightly lower than the initial starting
price
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.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words euros, price with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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