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In many countries, people do not recycle waste materials, such as bottles and newspapers. What are the reason for this? What could be done to solve this problem?

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Introduction
In recent years,
waste
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management
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have
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has
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 become an
improtant
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important
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and
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, and
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 it has been observed that in many nations,
people
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 still do not recycle the
waste
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 products,
such
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 as plastic bottles and newspapers. The majority of
such
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 behaviours
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are
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 noticed in developing
countries
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, where
people
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 are not given proper education and don't know the importance of
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environmental
 protection. To solve these
problems
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problems,
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 the
government
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 and public will have to work together.
Body paragraph 1
Nowadays, humans are producing more
waste
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 than ever before
and
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, and
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waste
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management
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palys
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plays
 an important role in a country's
overall
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 development. Most of the developed
countries
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 have the infrastructure and
technonolgy
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technology
, which is used to manage the production of
waste
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 efficiently.
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, developing
countries
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 lack the finance to use
the
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apply
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similar methods that are followed by developed
countries
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.
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, the majority of the population in developing
countries
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do
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does
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 not have the necessary education and
are
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is
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 not aware of the environmental damage caused by improper
waste
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management
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.
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,
people
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 who don't know that plastic bottles could be
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recycled
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 just throw them in the trash
,
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;
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 these
people
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 are not aware that plastic can't be decomposed and even if they
know
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know,
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 they lack the technology and proper infrastructure to recycle.
Body paragraph 2
On the other hand
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, these problems can be easily minimised with proper
planing
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planning
 and
coperation
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cooperation
 from both the public and the
government
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. Environmental
campanges
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campaigns
 can spread
awarness
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awareness
 in
people
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 about the issues and the solutions to reduce
it
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them
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.
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, the
government
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 should build a proper infrastructure by allocating
fundings
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funds
 specifically for
waste
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management
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, with strict guidelines and laws that should be adher by everyone. In every state
recycling
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, recycling
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 factories should be developed, which can create jobs for locals and
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apply
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help
the
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each state
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 manage
the
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its
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waste
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 by each state.
Conclusion
To sum up
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, it is very important to manage
waste
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 in every country,
while
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 developing
countries
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 may lack in some department,
people
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 and the
government
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 should work in unity to resolve the issues
cause
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caused
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 by the improper
waste
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management
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 so that we can save the environment.

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task response
You answer both parts of the question: why people do not recycle and what can be done. To make your answer stronger, explain the reasons in more detail. For example, people may not recycle because there are no bins near their homes, collection is not easy, or they do not get money back for bottles.
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Your main idea about poor education is clear, but do not make the problem seem to be mainly in developing countries. People in all countries may avoid recycling when it is hard, costly, or not part of daily life.
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Give one clear, real-life example for each solution. For example, say that homes can have separate bins for paper, plastic, and glass, and that shops can give a small payment when people return bottles.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear form: an opening, one paragraph on reasons, one paragraph on solutions, and a closing. This makes it easy to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Use clearer links between ideas. Instead of starting a new point with “Secondly” after a long first point, make each reason a separate short part. This will help the reader see the two main reasons at once.
coherence and cohesion
Some sentences are too long and join many ideas with commas. Split them into shorter sentences. For example: “Many people throw plastic bottles away. They may not know that plastic takes a very long time to break down. In some places, there are also no recycling services.”
coherence and cohesion
Avoid repeating words such as “proper,” “waste management,” and “developing countries” too often. Use simple changes such as “good systems,” “dealing with rubbish,” and “these nations.”
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You give clear causes, including a lack of public knowledge and a lack of recycling systems. You also give useful solutions, such as public campaigns, public money, laws, and recycling plants.
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The idea that recycling plants can both deal with rubbish and create local jobs is a useful and relevant point.
coherence and cohesion
Each main paragraph has one clear job: the first explains causes and the second gives solutions. Your ending also brings the main message together.
coherence and cohesion
You use linking words such as “In contrast,” “For instance,” “On the other hand,” and “To sum up” to guide the reader through the essay.
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