> You have recently started a new hobby. > Write a letter to a friend about your new hobby. In your letter: > * Explain what the hobby is and why you decided to take it up > * Describe what you do during this activity > * Invite your friend to try it with you >

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Dear David, I am writing to you
tell
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you about a new hobby that I
begin
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to take
in
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up
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. It
the
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ability to use your hand to draw different objects, starting with basic topics and complicated topics like human details. Everything happened accidentally, when I was going
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home, I got
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caught
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by
some
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advertisement that
encourage
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people to discover their hobbies. So, I decided to
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in
this
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test to check my hobby. As soon as I did the test, I
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found that my hobby is drawing. The examiner
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me to draw a house with details. As soon as I finished, I got 80% percentage. So , I decided to join the course to get
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. The course consists
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semesters, each semester takes roughly three weeks.
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, some students have the ability to master the course
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two weeks. Let me know what you think and if there is any possibility
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of joining
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us. Best wishes, Saif.

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Explain the hobby in a clear way. Say that you are learning to draw, and give a simple reason why you like it.
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Describe more of what you do in the class. For example, say that you draw houses, faces, and other small things, and practise with a pencil.
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Make the invite more direct. Ask David to come to a class with you on a day and at a time.
coherence and cohesion
Put the ideas in a clear order: say why you began, then say what you do, and then ask your friend to join.
coherence and cohesion
Use short, clear sentences. Some sentences are hard to follow, such as the first one and the part about the test.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words with care, such as “because”, “then”, and “also”. Do not begin many sentences with “As soon as”.
task response
You tell your friend about drawing and give a reason for starting it.
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You include an invite for your friend to join you.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a greeting, clear paragraphs, and a friendly closing.
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