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In future ,nobody will buy printed book or newspaper because they will be able to read everythung they want online without paying. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Introduction
Some people predict that in the future, nobody will read printed
books
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 or
newpapers
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newspapers
, and all reading will be
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 online.
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 agree that digital reading is
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 more
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common
,
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 completely disagree that paper-based
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material
 will disappear entirely.
Body paragraph 1
Admittedly, online reading offers many advantages, it is convenient, cost-effictive, and environmentally friendly, with a smart phone or tablet, peple can access thousands of
books
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 and new articles instantly, without need to store physical copies,
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 is especially popular among young generations, who prefer quick and easy acctess to information, during the covid-19,
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, many schools and libraies shifted to online resources, which proved highly efficient.
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, i believe that printed materials still hold siginificant values,
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, many people, including older adults and young generation, find it easier to read on paper, i t reduces eye sight, and helps with concentration, especially for the long texts,
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, printed
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 and papers do not rely on internet access or battery, making them more reliable in certain situation.
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, there is a strong emotional connection to physical
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 example, the feeling of turning pages and owning a personal library is
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irreplaceable
.
e-readers
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 may be practical,but they lack
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 sentimental value.
Conclusion
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 conclusion,
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 online
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reading
 will certainly continue to grow,
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 strongly disagree that printed
books
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 or newspapers will vanish
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 they offer us unique benefits that digital formats cannot replace
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 future is likely to be a mix of both, not a
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complete
 shift to one or the other.

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Your view is clear: you do not think paper books and newspapers will end. Keep this clear view in each main part.
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The first main part says why online reading is useful, but link it more directly to the idea that people may stop buying paper books. Explain why these good points may not be enough to end paper reading.
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Add a little more detail to your examples. For example, say how online school books helped students in Covid, and why this did not mean that paper books were no longer needed.
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Be careful with the point about the environment. Online reading can save paper, but phones and tablets also need power and can cause waste. A more balanced point will make your ideas stronger.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear order: opening, online reading, paper reading, and ending. Keep one main idea in each part.
coherence and cohesion
Some sentences are too long and joined only with commas. Make them shorter. Use full stops after complete ideas so the reader can follow your meaning more easily.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words at the start of ideas in a clear way: “However,” “First,” “Also,” and “For example.” Do not put several full ideas in one sentence.
coherence and cohesion
Make the link between ideas more clear. For example: “Although online reading is cheap and easy, paper books still have uses that screens cannot give.”
coherence and cohesion
Check basic word form and spelling because they can make the flow less clear: “newspapers,” “materials,” “becoming,” “common,” “people,” “access,” “libraries,” and “reading.”
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You answer the full question and give a clear, strong view from the start to the end.
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You use useful reasons for both sides, such as low cost and easy access online, then focus, no battery need, and the feeling of owning books.
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Your Covid school and library example is on topic and helps show why online reading has grown.
coherence and cohesion
The opening clearly states the topic and your view, and the ending brings your main ideas together.
coherence and cohesion
The second main part has a good list of reasons for paper reading, with “firstly,” “secondly,” and “finally.”
Fully explain your ideas

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