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ADVANTAGESAND DIS ADVANTAGES of online education during covid

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Introduction
Covid pandemic has closed all the schools. Now tutors and pupils are using electronic
devices
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 to study online.
This
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issue
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 has sparked considerable debate. The essay will present the advantages and disadvantages of using electronic
devices
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 as a study tool.
Body paragraph 1
In the first place, it would be quite true to say that using electronic accessories as a medium of learning is convenient for both the teacher and students. One illustration of
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 is that
teachers
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 can take online
classes
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 by using online platforms
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 as Microsoft
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 and Google Meet. By using these tools,
teachers
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 can easily deliver lectures
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as well as can
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 assign them homeworks.
Body paragraph 2
Another major advantage of
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 side of the
issue
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 is that it has bridged the gap between student and teacher.
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,
teachers
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 and students can connect easily. They can take
classes
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 from any part of the world.
Body paragraph 3
To put the
issue
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 into perspective, the third most important, which is worth considering, is that with the help of these electronic
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devices
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devices,
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 there
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 no
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 of delay in education.
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, with the help of an online system,
teachers
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 can now
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teachers could
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take
classes
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 in any situation, and there is no chance that the education of students will suffer any gaps or delays.
Body paragraph 4
To say
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, one factor that needs consideration would be that online education is expensive. An example that can be put forward is that many
low income
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low-income
 families cannot afford these
devices
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.
Body paragraph 5
Yet, there is a dark side to the picture, which advocates that there are still many areas of
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underdeveloped
 countries where internet facilities are not adequate.
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, in Pakistan, many northern areas have no internet facility
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 to which it is not possible to deliver online
classes
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 there.
Conclusion
In conclusion, I am convinced to believe that it is indeed a debatable
issue
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 which needs
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 analysis and discussion.
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, in light of the above-discussed arguments and examples, it would be quite safe
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 that the advantages of online learning outweigh its disadvantages in many different aspects.

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task response
Cover both sides in a more even way. You give three good points for online learning, but only two points against it. Add one more clear bad point, such as less face-to-face talk or poor focus at home.
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Make your main view clear from the start. Say if you think the good points are stronger than the bad points, and then show this in the body parts.
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Give more detail for each example. For example, explain how online classes save time, or why poor internet stops students from learning.
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Some examples are useful, such as low-income families and places in Pakistan with no internet. Keep examples close to the main point and explain their effect.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear start, main parts, and ending. However, use a simpler plan: one part for good points, one part for bad points, then a short ending.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear link words to show the order of ideas: First, Also, However, Finally, and In conclusion. Avoid long phrases such as “To put the issue into perspective” because they do not add much.
coherence and cohesion
Keep one main idea in each paragraph. The third good point has some repeated words: “teachers can now teachers could take classes.” Rewrite it in one clear sentence.
coherence and cohesion
Use the same words for the topic. Choose “online education” or “online learning” and use it often, instead of changing between “electronic accessories,” “electronic devices,” and “online system.”}],
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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