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Sometimes spouses have to live far away from each other. Maintaining a long distance relationship is sometimes difficult and straining. What do you think are the main reasons of long distance relationships? What can be done to help couples feel closer?

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Introduction
under the
inluence
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influence
 of rapid changes of
lifestyes
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lifestyles
 and economic situation, people surviving
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 society are required to scout for
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opportunities
 individually.
as
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oversees
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overseas
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 working
opprotunities
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opportunities
 have been discovered,
partners
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 are forced to move
aboard
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 in order to get better
payed
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paid
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treated
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Body paragraph 1
long distances have
then
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 been created as
partners
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 might go into different ways of self developments and improvement
due to
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 their
expecations
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expectations
 and goals in life,
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 providing a better environment for their children, paying off heavily burdened medical bills
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 even just a simple improvement of life
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 to their current economic state.
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 might
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also
 travel
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overseas
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 educations
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 as gaining another
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 can
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broaden
 their perspective
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 their current interests or jobs.
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depite of
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 jobs and
further
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educations
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, enlisting in the military can
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seperte parners
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separate partners
 apart.
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 personally think that
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 situation is the worst as we will have no idea if our
partners
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 will
then
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 be summoned to join the army for a war and
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millions
 sleepless
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 wondering and
worring abot
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worrying about
 if they could be back safe and alive.
Conclusion
many
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 people may suggest that maintaining a long
distace
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distance
 is difficult as
ones
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 should have strong willpower and the strength to avoid temptations.
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 personally think that as long as we all contain a faithful heart and always remember the person who was staying next to us during the darkest journey, actively reaching out for communications and update
partners
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frequenly
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frequently
, these allow all members in the group to be involved and feel supported and encouraged even though they are not physically standing next to us.

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task response
Answer both parts in a clear way. Your essay explains why couples live far apart, but the help section is short. Add two or three clear ways to help, such as set times to call, plan visits, and share daily news.
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State your main idea at the start. For example: work, study, and army work are the main causes. Then say that regular contact and future plans can help couples stay close.
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Use clear examples that show how each point affects a couple. For example, a person may work in another country to pay for a child’s school, while the other partner stays at home.
coherence and cohesion
Use a simple four-part plan: start, reasons, ways to help, and end. This will make your answer easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Put one main idea in each paragraph. The first body paragraph can be about work and study. The next can be about army work. The last can be about ways to stay close.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words to show the order of your ideas: First, Also, However, For example, and In the end. Do not join too many ideas in one long sentence.
coherence and cohesion
Write a short ending that repeats your answer. This will give the essay a clear finish.
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You give several useful reasons for living far apart, including work, study, and army work.
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Your ideas are linked to real life, such as paying bills and giving children a better life.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has separate paragraphs, and each paragraph has a clear general topic.
coherence and cohesion
You try to connect ideas with words such as “despite” and “as long as,” which helps show how your points are related.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • work-related relocation
  • career opportunity
  • overseas assignment
  • higher education
  • professional training
  • family obligations
  • high living costs
  • physical separation
  • emotional strain
  • maintain regular contact
  • video call
  • share daily experiences
  • build mutual trust
  • open communication
  • avoid misunderstandings
  • plan regular visits
  • quality time
  • a clear long-term plan
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