You borrowed an item from your friend. While it was in your possession, it got damaged. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: Thank your friend for lending the item to you. Explain how it got damaged. Tell your friend what you plan to do about it.

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Hello Rahul, Hope
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letter finds you well and you are in good health and in high spirits. I am writing
this
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letter to express my appreciation
regarding
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the
laptop
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you had given during my exams. As you
know
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I recently moved to Canada from India as
a International
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an international
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student
so
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my financial situation was
bit
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tight and not able to buy
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laptop
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a laptop
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for my exam as I have to pay tuition fees for
next
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the next
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semester .
Besides
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this
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, I want to tell you that
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using
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laptop
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the laptop
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accidentally fell
into
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onto
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the ground and
screen
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the screen
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got broken
now
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. Now
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we need to replace the screen because it
fells
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sharply
into
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the ground.
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, as
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incident
happend
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happened
during my tenure , I will
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all the
expense
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to replace the screen .I will bring back
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the
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laptop
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when I received back from the computer shop.
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Lastly
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, I want to say
thankyou
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thank you
for your
coperation
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cooperation
and patience. Yours truly, Navdeep

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Thank your friend more clearly. Say that the laptop was very helpful for your exams.
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Explain the accident in a clear way. For example, say where the laptop fell and what happened to the screen.
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Your plan is clear, but add when you will take it to the shop and when you hope to give it back.
coherence and cohesion
Use short paragraphs: thanks, the accident, your plan, and a final thank-you.
coherence and cohesion
Link your ideas with simple words such as “because”, “so”, “however”, and “therefore”.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear sentences. For example: “The laptop fell on the floor, and the screen broke.”
coherence and cohesion
End the letter in a more natural way, such as “Thank you for your understanding.”
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You cover all the main points: thanks, the damage, and your plan to pay for the repair.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a clear start, middle, and end, and the greeting and closing are suitable for a friend.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

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