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The chart below shows the number of girls per 100 boys enrolled in different levels of school education. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The chart below shows the number of girls per 100 boys enrolled in different levels of school education. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph shows data on the
number
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 of
girls
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 per 100 enrolled in three different types of school
program
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programs
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.
Overall
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, when the developed
countries
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was
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had
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 the highest
number
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 of
girls
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 in three different school types between 1990 and 1998, which surpassed
in tertiary
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the target level in tertiary education
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education
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 at target level. There
were
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was
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 a downward trend in developing
countries
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 in three different school
education
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, which gradually decreased
throught
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throughout
 the period. Developed
countries
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 recorded
higher
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a higher
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number
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 than developing
countries
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 from 1990 to 1998. In secondary
education
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, developed
countries
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 increased steadily
number
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 of
girls
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.
In addition
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, developing
countries
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 fall
both of years
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behind
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 in secondary
education
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. Tertiary
education
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 was recorded about 105 and 112
girls
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 between 1990 and 1998 by developed
countries
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,
wheras
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whereas
 developing
countries
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 have the lowest figure
66
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, 66
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 and 75 in 1990 and 1998, respectively.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, girls, countries, education with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • chart
  • number
  • girls
  • boys
  • enrolled
  • education
  • primary
  • secondary
  • higher
  • ratio
  • indicate
  • barriers
  • accessible
  • significant
  • decline
  • pursuing
  • features
  • comparisons
  • gender
  • equality
  • societal
  • norms
  • progress
  • issues
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