1.You and your brother have decided to go for a holiday but due to some reason, your brother is not able to join you for holiday. Write a letter to your friend to invite him/her for holiday. Give detail plan of vacation. State reason why your brother will not come with you. Invite your friend.
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Hello Anchal,
I hope you are doing well. I'm writing
this
letter to ask if you can join me for Linking Words
holiday
, which Correct article usage
a holiday
i
am Fix capitalization
I
suppose
to go with my brother.
My brother and Wrong verb form
supposed
i
had a plan to go to Blue Mountain Fix capitalization
I
this
winter vacation. We had a plan for skiing and river rafting. We heard that there is a museum near Blue Linking Words
mountain
which shows Capitalize the proper name
Mountain
picture
of Check wording
pictures
historial monumets
. So we were excited to visit there too.
Recently, Correct your spelling
historical monuments
My
brother called me and informed me that he Fix capitalization
my
have
to go back to India for a wedding of his friend Correct subject-verb agreement
has
which
is happening near our holiday season. He cannot say no to his friend because he is his childhood friend Punctuation problem
, which
and
he doesn't want to miss his marriage.
I am looking forward Punctuation problem
, and
for you
response to my letter so we can plan more about our holiday.
Best Regards,
RajatChange preposition
to your
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task response
Say more about the trip plan, such as the days, where you will stay, and how you will travel. Ask your friend to tell you soon if they can come.
task response
Make the invite more clear and warm. For example: “Would you like to come with me?”
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear order: plan, reason, and invite. Use simple link words such as “also”, “because”, and “so” to make the ideas flow better.
coherence and cohesion
Keep one main idea in each paragraph. The last paragraph should include both the invite and a clear next step.
coherence and cohesion
Use a friendly closing, such as “Best wishes,” or “Take care,” before your name.
task response
You explain why your brother cannot go, and the reason is clear and believable.
task response
You give useful details about the holiday, including Blue Mountain, skiing, river rafting, and the museum.
coherence and cohesion
The letter is easy to follow because each paragraph has a clear purpose.
coherence and cohesion
You use a friendly greeting and closing that fit a letter to a friend.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite