1.You and your brother have decided to go for a holiday but due to some reason, your brother is not able to join you for holiday. Write a letter to your friend to invite him/her for holiday. Give detail plan of vacation. State reason why your brother will not come with you. Invite your friend.

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Hello Anchal, I hope you are doing well. I'm writing
this
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letter to ask if you can join me for
holiday
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a holiday
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, which
i
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I
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am
suppose
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to go with my brother. My brother and
i
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I
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had a plan to go to Blue Mountain
this
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winter vacation. We had a plan for skiing and river rafting. We heard that there is a museum near Blue
mountain
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Mountain
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which shows
picture
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pictures
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of
historial monumets
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historical monuments
. So we were excited to visit there too. Recently,
My
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brother called me and informed me that he
have
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to go back to India for a wedding of his friend
which
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, which
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is happening near our holiday season. He cannot say no to his friend because he is his childhood friend
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he doesn't want to miss his marriage. I am looking forward
for you
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response to my letter so we can plan more about our holiday. Best Regards, Rajat

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task response
Say more about the trip plan, such as the days, where you will stay, and how you will travel. Ask your friend to tell you soon if they can come.
task response
Make the invite more clear and warm. For example: “Would you like to come with me?”
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear order: plan, reason, and invite. Use simple link words such as “also”, “because”, and “so” to make the ideas flow better.
coherence and cohesion
Keep one main idea in each paragraph. The last paragraph should include both the invite and a clear next step.
coherence and cohesion
Use a friendly closing, such as “Best wishes,” or “Take care,” before your name.
task response
You explain why your brother cannot go, and the reason is clear and believable.
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You give useful details about the holiday, including Blue Mountain, skiing, river rafting, and the museum.
coherence and cohesion
The letter is easy to follow because each paragraph has a clear purpose.
coherence and cohesion
You use a friendly greeting and closing that fit a letter to a friend.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
Topic Vocabulary:
  • invite
  • holiday
  • friend
  • brother
  • reason
  • work
  • cannot
  • go
  • trip
  • place
  • coast
  • beach
  • hotel
  • room
  • budget
  • cost
  • share
  • plan
  • days
  • day
  • travel
  • train
  • bus
  • car
  • flight
  • book
  • ticket
  • market
  • food
  • water
  • swim
  • walk
  • island
  • boat
  • return
  • pack
  • bring
  • weather
  • sun
  • rain
  • please
  • thank
  • you
  • hope
  • come
  • soon
  • yours
  • best
  • regards
  • sign
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