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Some People have vehicle free days , banning cars,trucks and motorbikes in the city centre. Only buses , bicycles and taxis are permitted. Do the advantages outweigh the drawbacks.

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Introduction
In
the few
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recent
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 years,
vehicle
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 has had becoming a tendency. People use them
replace
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with
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walking to save time. There are various kinds of
transportation
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,
such
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 as buses, trucks and motorbikes.
However
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, not all of them are allowed to appear in the downtown. In cities, it is only common to see buses, bicycles and taxis.
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 essay suggest the outcome
is brought
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has more advantages to a great extent.
Body paragraph 1
In terms of social order, it is difficult for
government
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the government
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 to regulate all kinds of
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vehicle
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vehicles
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.
This
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 will lead
several
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 problems if it is indeed
conducting
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,
for example
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, the government starts to allocate new roads for
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a new
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 type of
transportation
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, which is a massive undertaking.
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,
appearing more
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more vehicles appearing
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vehicle
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 means that the jam of
transportation
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 is more likely to occur. More seriously, it will cause
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apply
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social
transportation
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has collapsed
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 if
could
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it is
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 not
deal
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dealt
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 with it on time.
Body paragraph 2
Meanwhile, in personal view, the issue of safety will become a major threat. Given the uncommon
vehicle
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occuring
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occurring
, people would not adapt
it
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 in
short
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a short
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 time.
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, those
vehicle
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, like banning cars, trucks and motorbikes, has the
character
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characteristics
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 of high velocity and large body
which
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 may threaten people's security itself. These characters underline the advantage of
current
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the current
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vehicle
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.
Conclusion
In
conclude
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,
this
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 essay stresses that the
advanges
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advantages
 far outweigh the disadvantages for
current
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the current
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 pattern of
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vehicle
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vehicles
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.

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task response
Answer the main question more directly. Say clearly why the good points are greater than the bad points, and also explain at least one bad point, such as problems for people who need to drive to work or move heavy things.
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Your main ideas do not fully match the topic. The topic is about one or more car-free days, but the essay often talks about all vehicles in city centres. Keep the focus on car-free days and on cars, trucks, and motorbikes being banned.
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Develop each idea with a clear reason and a real example. For example, fewer cars can make the air cleaner and streets safer; however, shops may get fewer buyers if people cannot bring large items home.
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Make your view clear in every part. Explain why the good points, such as less traffic and safer streets, are more important than the problems.
coherence and cohesion
Use a simple four-part plan: introduction, good points, bad points, and conclusion. This will make the answer easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Start each body paragraph with one clear main idea. For example: “One main advantage is less traffic.” Then give reasons and an example before moving to the next idea.
coherence and cohesion
Some sentences are hard to understand because the word order is not clear. Write shorter sentences. For example, change “This essay suggest the outcome is brought has more advantages” to “This essay argues that the advantages are greater than the disadvantages.”
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words in a clear way: “First”, “Also”, “However”, “For example”, and “Therefore”. Do not use “Meanwhile” when the next paragraph gives another advantage; use “Another advantage” instead.
coherence and cohesion
Check key words. Use “vehicles” for more than one vehicle, “traffic jam” or “traffic jams”, “occur” instead of “occuring”, and “In conclusion” instead of “In conclude”.
task response
You give a clear general view that car-free city centres can have more good points than bad points.
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You mention useful ideas about traffic, safety, and the work of the government. These are related to the topic.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has an introduction, two main paragraphs, and a conclusion. This is a helpful basic shape.
coherence and cohesion
You try to use linking words such as “However”, “Additionally”, and “Furthermore” to connect your ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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