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The plans show a student common room from five years ago and now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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Introduction
These two maps depict different layouts of the same common room over a period of five years.
Body paragraph 1
Overall
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, major changes have been made to
modernize
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 the space; several new items were added to replace older furniture, particularly in the southeast corner.
Body paragraph 2
At first glance, the number of circular tables in the middle of the room has dropped from four to two. In place of the top-left circular table, a new rectangular table was added, surrounded by eight blue chairs.
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, a new bench for laptops was installed along the southern wall.
Conclusion
Moreover
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, the southeast area underwent a massive
modernization
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. The old bookshelf was converted into an entertainment space, featuring a modern television and three brown armchairs. Another detail is that a drinks machine was placed next to the old fridge. Taking a quick look at the top row,
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 kitchen area has only undergone a minor change, with one of the benches replaced by a second microwave.

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Give a clearer main view of the changes. For example, say that the room now has more places for group work, laptop use, and rest, while the number of round tables is lower.
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Make sure every change is fully clear. The first line about the round tables may confuse the reader because it does not clearly say where the two tables are now.
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Use more exact map words when possible. Instead of saying “top-left” and “top row”, use “north-west” and “along the north wall” if these match the plan.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear order: overview, centre and south, then east and north. Keep this strong plan in future map reports.
coherence and cohesion
Link some ideas more smoothly. “Another detail is” and “Taking a quick look” sound less formal. Use “In addition”, “Meanwhile”, or “In the north of the room” instead.
coherence and cohesion
The last paragraph has several ideas in one long part. Split it into two shorter sentences: one for the south-east area and one for the kitchen area.
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You describe the main changes well, including fewer round tables, a new large table, a laptop bench, a TV area, a drinks machine, and a second microwave.
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Your overview clearly states that the room was made more modern and that the south-east area changed the most.
coherence and cohesion
The report is easy to follow because you move through the room by area.
coherence and cohesion
You use useful comparison words such as “In place of”, “Additionally”, and “Moreover” to show change.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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