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The plans show a student common room from five years ago and now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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Introduction
These paragraphs are going to describe the difference between
a
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 student common space before and after 5 years. Taking a quick look at the amenities and positions, a large change can be
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.
Body paragraph 1
When
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 at the first picture, it
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 be easily
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 that the common space 5 years ago
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had
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 4
circle-shape
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circular
 tables, each surrounded
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 6 blue chairs. Take another look
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at
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 the
right
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corner
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, there is a bookshelf. On the top row of the picture, there are many facilities
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 as a cupboard, a sink, two benches, a microwave and a fridge.
Conclusion
Looking at the second picture, which
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 the current state of the space, the main area of tables has
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 immense change. The number of circle table has dropped from
fours
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four
 to two tables.
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, a rectangular table with 10 more chairs has been added to the top left
corner
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. In the
right
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corner
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, the bookshelf has been replaced by a television with 3 armchairs, and
right
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 next to it is a bench for laptops.
On
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 the top
right
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corner
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, a drinks machine has been placed.
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on
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the top row has not changed much, it still has
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the same
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 kinds of facilities
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however
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, a bench has been replaced by a microwave.

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task response
Add a clear main idea at the start. For example, say that the room now has fewer round tables but more types of seating and new items.
task response
Check all changes with care. The last line is not clear: say exactly which bench was taken away and where the microwave was put.
task response
Use the correct words for the plans. Write “common room”, not “common space”, and say “five years ago” and “now” clearly.
coherence and cohesion
Put the old plan in one body part and the new plan in the next. Then add a short final part that brings the main changes together.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear link words to show change, such as “while”, “in contrast”, “in addition”, and “was replaced by”.
coherence and cohesion
Make each sentence easy to follow. For example, write “The number of round tables fell from four to two” instead of “has dropped from fours to two tables”.
task response
You describe the main parts of both plans, including tables, chairs, the bookcase, TV area, and kitchen items.
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You make useful comparisons, such as the change from four round tables to two and the bookcase being replaced by a TV.
coherence and cohesion
Your answer has a clear time order: first the old room, then the room now.
coherence and cohesion
You use place words well, such as “top left corner”, “right corner”, and “top row”, so the reader can follow the plan.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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