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The pie charts show the results of a survey in which undergraduates and postgraduates were asked about the range of books and non-printed materials in their school library.

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The pie charts show the results of a survey in which undergraduates and postgraduates were asked about the range of books and non-printed materials in their school library.
The pie charts give information on the results of a survey in which undergraduate and postgraduate students were asked about the range of books and non-printed materials in their school library.
Overall
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,
undergraduates
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 tended to rate the library’s school more positively than
postgraduates
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. The
proportion
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 of students giving a “very good” rating was higher for
undergraduates
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 for both the range of books and non-print materials,
whereas
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postgraduates
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 were more likely to give a “not good” rating. Looking first at the range of books,
undergraduates
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 generally expressed more positive views than
postgraduates
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. Among
undergraduates
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, "very good" accounted for the largest
proportion
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, at 37%, compared with 22% of
postgraduates
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,
while
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 the figures for satisfactory ratings were relatively similar, at 35% for
undergraduates
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 and 28% for
postgraduates
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. The most striking difference can be seen in " not good" , only 28% of
undergraduates
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 chose
this
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 option,
whereas
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 the figure for
postgraduates
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 rose steeply to 50%. Regarding non-print materials," very good" was represented for 68% of
undergraduates
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, which was more than four times the figure for
postgraduates
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 at just 16%. Satisfaction levels were relatively similar between the two groups, at 20% for
undergraduates
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 and 22% for
postgraduates
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.
By contrast
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, the
proportion
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 of
postgraduates
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 as " not good" reached 62%, considerably higher than the
proportion
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 among
undergraduates
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, recorded 12%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words undergraduates, postgraduates, proportion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • satisfaction
  • non-printed materials
  • e-books
  • online journals
  • survey results
  • percentage
  • preferences
  • library resources
  • printed materials
  • undergraduates
  • postgraduates
  • range of books
  • accessibility
  • research tools
  • student needs
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