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Waste disposal in one European country (2005-2008)

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Introduction
The bar chart illustrates the average bulk of
waste
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 disposed of by three different methods in a European country between 2005 and 2008, measured in
million
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tonnes
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.
Body paragraph 1
Overall
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, the volume of
waste
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 sent to landfill experienced a sharp decline throughout the period.
By contrast
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, burning became increasingly popular and was the main method of
waste
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 disposal in 2008. The amount of
waste
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 dumped at sea
also
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 showed a gradual decrease.
Body paragraph 2
In 2005, landfills accounted for the largest amount of
waste
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, at approximately 1,800
million
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tonnes
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.
This
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 figure fell steadily to about 1,100
million
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tonnes
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 in 2008. Meanwhile, the amount of
waste
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 dumped at sea dropped from roughly 550
million
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tonnes
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 to 450
million
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tonnes
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 between 2005 and 2006. It continued to fall to approximately 350
million
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tonnes
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 in 2007 and 250
million
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tonnes
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 in 2008.
Conclusion
As for burning, the figure was relatively stable at 450
million
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tonnes
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 in both 2005 and 2006. It
then
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 rose gradually to about 500
million
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tonnes
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 in 2007. In the final years, there was a more noticeable increase, with the figure reaching approximately 600
million
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tonnes
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.

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task response
Check the chart data very carefully. The report says burning was the main way in 2008, but landfill was still higher at about 1,100 million tonnes, while burning was about 600 million tonnes. This is the main problem in the answer.
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Make the overview fully true. Say that landfill stayed the largest method, even though it fell a lot. Say that burning went up, while sea dumping went down.
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Give the last figure for burning in one clear way. The phrase “In the final years” is not clear because only the 2008 number is given after it. Write that it rose to about 600 million tonnes in 2008.
coherence and cohesion
The answer has a clear order: opening, overview, then details. Keep this plan, as it makes the data easy to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear linking words, but make time words exact. For example, use “from 2005 to 2008”, “in 2007”, and “in 2008” when you give each number.
coherence and cohesion
Group the data by main change. One paragraph can compare landfill and sea dumping because both fell. Another can describe burning because it went up.
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You report all three ways of waste disposal and include key numbers for each one.
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The answer gives a useful overview of the main changes over time.
coherence and cohesion
The paragraphs are well ordered, and the reader can follow the report easily.
coherence and cohesion
Words such as “Overall”, “By contrast”, “Meanwhile”, and “As for” help show links between ideas.
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