Your friend recently came to your birthday party and bought you an expensive present. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • thank your friend • explain how useful the present is • arrange to meet up with your friend sometime soon You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear……………………,

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Dear John, I hope
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are doing well. Thank you so much for coming
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my birthday party, it was really an amazing time
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we had a lot of fun. I was so surprised that you gifted me a
playstation
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PlayStation
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. I was planning to buy one before
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this
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end of the month so I can play upcoming games.
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, I am very thankful to you and excited to play as
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.
This
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present is very useful because it relaxes my mind. I play
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every night after finishing my
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and work.
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, I made new friends
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playing multiplayer
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we
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planning a trip together.
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, it helps me to improve my social skills. I would like to meet you again whenever you
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from your work so that we
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play and enjoy together.
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, I would
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be happy
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to introduce you to my new friends. Thank you so much for
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present
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this
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means a lot to me.
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you soon. Regards, Swet

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task response
You answer all parts of the task: you say thank you, show why the gift is useful, and ask to meet soon. Add a clear day or time for the meeting, such as next Saturday, to make the plan more complete.
task response
Keep the letter friendly but a little more natural. For example, say “Thank you for coming to my birthday party” and “I would be happy to introduce you to my new friends.”
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has clear paragraphs and a good order. Use simple linking words to join ideas, but do not use “Moreover” and “As a result” too often. “Also” and “Because of this” may sound more natural here.
coherence and cohesion
Check small grammar points so the ideas are easy to read: “I hope you are well,” “when you are free,” and “I play it every night.” Start the last line with a capital letter: “See you soon.”
task response
You give clear and personal reasons why the PlayStation is useful: it helps you rest, play games, and meet new people.
coherence and cohesion
The letter is easy to follow. It begins with thanks, then talks about the gift, and ends with an idea to meet.
coherence and cohesion
Each main paragraph has one clear focus, which helps the reader understand your message.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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