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The graph shows the value in US dollars (in millions of dollars) of investment in funds of four categories from 1988 to 2014.

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The graph shows the value in US dollars (in millions of dollars) of investment in funds of four categories from 1988 to 2014.
The line graph illustrates the
money
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amount
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 of investment between four various items,
such
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 as
,
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 Property, Gold, Fine Art, and Company shares in
US
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the US
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 over a 26-year span from 1988 to 2014, with units measured in
millions
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 of
dollars
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.
Overall
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,it can be seen that Gold experienced a remarkable rise
of
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 investment,
while
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 other materials showed some
fluctutions
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fluctuations
 throughout the period. Regarding the details, Gold had a dramatic growth, starting at a low point of nearly 100
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millions of
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million
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dollars
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 in 1988 and climbing sharply
ti
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to
 reach about 450
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millions of
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million
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dollars
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 in 2012.
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, it faced a slight
decreased
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decrease
 to
rech
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reach
 around 350
millions
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 of
dollars
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at the end
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 of the period. With regard to Property, it recorded its lowest point in 2014 to reach around 190
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millions of
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million
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dollars
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.
In contrast
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, Company shares was the lowest point in tha beginning of the period, specifically in
1988
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1988,
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to record
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recording
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 a figure that
it is
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was
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 lower
50
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than 50
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millions
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million
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dollars
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.
Moreover
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, it increased to reach approximately
to
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apply
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250
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millions of
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million
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dollars
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 in 2014.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words millions, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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