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Social media is a good thing for modern society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

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Introduction
Many people
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 that online community is providing a lot of
benificial
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benefits
 for modern society.
On the other hand
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, some argue that social
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media
 is toxic and misleading.
Body paragraph 1
As social
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media
 are easily
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, nowadays, many people, especially parents of youngsters worried about the misleading information, scamming, and the
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children addicted
 to using
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.
Body paragraph 2
There
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also
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many
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 news that underage children are abducted by love
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scams
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, mass shooting learnt from
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the internet
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,
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connecting
 to
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 and scam groups.
Body paragraph 3
However
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, as mentioned above, social media has created many job opportunities. They have
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 been
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 for sale;
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a lot of retailers
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 their products via social
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platforms
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 without
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 a physical store, which in turn
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 lower the
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prices of their products
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. In the past, we
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 to
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an academy
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 to learn new language
,
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 new skills, and
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 limited by school
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, school capacity, and locations, etc.
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, in the present,many educators provide free educational
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videos
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 through social
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platforms
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 and we can learn
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without the hassle
 of travel or fees.
Conclusion
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, if parents or elders give a proper guide for their children, social media's positive impact is greater than
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its negative
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 impact.

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Make your view clear in the first part. Say if you agree, disagree, or agree only in part. Keep this same view in the whole essay.
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Explain why social media is good and why it can cause harm. Give one clear example for each main point, such as free online lessons or false news sent to young people.
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Some ideas are too short. After each point, add why it matters and what it can lead to. This will make your answer more full and clear.
coherence and cohesion
Use a simple plan: first part with your view, one part on the bad side, one part on the good side, and a last part with your final view.
coherence and cohesion
Start each part with a clear main sentence. For example: “Social media can be unsafe for children.” Then give details and an example.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words with care: “First”, “However”, “For example”, “As a result”, and “In short”. Do not join too many ideas in one long sentence.
coherence and cohesion
The last part gives your view, but make it stronger. Say that social media is more good than bad only when parents, schools, and users help children use it in a safe way.
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You discuss both the bad and good sides of social media, which is useful for this question.
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Your points about online jobs, lower shop costs, and free learning are on topic and helpful.
coherence and cohesion
You use paragraph breaks and words such as “However” and “Hence” to show changes between ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Your final idea links the good and bad sides by saying that adult help can make social media safer for children.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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