Your local community centre is planning to start a new weekend program for adults and has asked local residents for suggestions. Write a letter to the manager of the community centre. In your letter: suggest an activity that the weekend program could offer explain why this activity would be useful for people in your community say how you could personally help with the program

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Dear Sir or Madam, I hope you are doing well. I am writing to suggest an
activity
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for our new weekend program for adults. I would suggest a sports
activity
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for the new program. The
athletics
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activity
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could be either a sport like football or running. Sport
activity
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not only build a good fitness but
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maintains your health. Nowadays, people, especially adults, are getting inactive in their lifestyle
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hactic schedule or mobile phones.
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, activities like running or playing football will make them feel better and less stressed.
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, sports could increase stamina and cardiovascular health, which most of the people are suffering
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, I have been a sports coach at my school since
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year. I could arrange a team , and they could play each other.
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, I could arrange a ground every weekend by getting
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permission from my principal.
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, I could personally track every individual's health and could suggest the right food to improve it. Thank you so much. Regards, swet

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Give one clear activity, such as a weekly running club, instead of two different ideas. Add a few details about the time, place, and group.
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Your reasons are good. Explain more clearly how the program can help adults meet new people as well as stay fit.
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Your personal help is clear. Be careful not to promise too much, such as giving food advice, unless you have training for this.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a clear start, main part, and end. Use simple link words such as "First", "Also", and "For this reason" to make the ideas flow better.
coherence and cohesion
Keep each paragraph on one main idea: the activity, why it helps, and how you can help. This will make the letter easier to read.
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Use a more formal end, such as "Yours faithfully," after "Dear Sir or Madam,".
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You answer all three parts of the letter: you suggest an activity, give reasons, and say how you can help.
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Your idea of running or football is useful because it can help adults feel less stressed and stay active.
coherence and cohesion
Your paragraphs are in a good order, and the reader can follow your main points easily.
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You use linking words such as "As a result", "Furthermore", and "Moreover" to connect ideas.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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