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The charts below give information about the way in which water was used in different countries in 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevan

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The charts below give information about the way in which water was used in different countries in 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevan
The pie chart illustrates the
usuage
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usage
 of
water
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 all over the world in three different sectors ,
while
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 the bar graph shows the proportion of
water
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 used in 4 countries
in particular
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2000
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in 2000
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 .
Overall
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 , the ratio of
water
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 consumed
in
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worldwide for agriculture was maximum ,
whereas
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the
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Canada was the country to use minimum
water
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 for the same sector . The domestic sector was seen moderate in both the charts
To begin
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 , the
water
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 used in agriculture , domestic and industry was 70 , 22 and 8
percentage
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per cent
 respectively .
However
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 , the ratio there was
difference
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a difference
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 of 23
percent
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per cent
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 between
india
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India
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 and
china
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China
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 for using
water
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 for farming .
Moreover
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 , the highest ratio for
water
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usuage
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usage
 in
industrial
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the industrial
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 field was seen in Canada
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,
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which was 80 . Moving forward , India is the least
to utilized
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utilised
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water
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 for domestic and industry
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, which
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that is
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 5% and 3% ,
although
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 in farming it is
highest
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the highest
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92
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% . The Newzeland was consuming nearly the same
for
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amount for
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 agriculture and households .

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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 3 times.
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