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The chart below shows the main reasons why students chose to study at a particular university in the UK in 1995 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The chart below shows the main reasons why students chose to study at a particular university in the UK in 1995 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The chart illustrates information about the percentage of pupils
according to
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 the primary reasons
of
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for
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 selecting a specific
university
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 in the United Kingdom to study in 1995 and 2005.
Overall
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, what stands out from the chart is that the
university
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 suitable for
chosen
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the chosen
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 course was by far the highest purpose for both years.
Furthermore
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, at the beginning of the
period
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period,
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 close to
parental
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the parental
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 home was the lowest motivation to study in the
university
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,
while
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 sporting facilities
was
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were
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 the least favourite
reason
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 to select a college
at the end
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 of the period.
To begin
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 with, suitable for chosen cousre was the highest
reason
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 to select a specific
university
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with
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was the availability of a suitable course, with
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 around 35% in 1995, and the second
common
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most common
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reason
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 was
availability
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the availability
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 of
wide
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a wide
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 range of resources
with
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, with
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 21% in the same year.
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, sporting facilities placed the third motivational purpose in 1995 at just 19%, the
disatnce
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distance
 to parental home and quality of teaching were at 10% and 15%, respectively. By 2005, the figure of suitable for chosen course remained the highest with 37%,
while
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 the figure of close to parental home increased sharply by 12%, the
reason
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 of chosen sporting facilities dropped significantly by 13%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words university, reason with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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