You recently applied for two separate jobs. Both have chosen to hire you, but you must write a letter to one of them explaining why you are unable to take the position. An apology An explanation of your situation

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Dear Sir, I am writing
this
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letter to sincerely apologise, because I would not be able to take the position of staff nurse at your hospital. After I gave
interview
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an interview
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at your hospital, my friend informed me about vacancies that opened at Fortis
hospital
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Hospital
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, Ludhiana. So, I thought to give the interview at
that
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those
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premises as well. They
also
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sent me an appointment letter two days before.
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, I decided to join there
and
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, and
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my joining is
in the
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apply
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next week. To be honest, I was curious to work at your hospital because it is one of the prestigious hospitals.
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, I wanted to experience
the
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apply
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city life by living independently. But my parents convinced me to join
nearby
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the nearby
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hospital in Ludhiana
as
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, as
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Mohali is far away from my home.
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is the only reason
because of which
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why
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,
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apply
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I changed my opinion. I am really grateful for your invitation, but please forgive me. Yours sincerely, Prabh.

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task response
Give a clearer reason for your choice. Say that the new job is much closer to your home and that this is important for your family.
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Ask for their kind understanding at the end. This makes your apology feel more complete.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear start, middle, and end. Make the order even smoother: apology first, reason next, then a short thank-you and closing.
coherence and cohesion
Keep each paragraph on one main point. Put your wish to live in the city and your parents’ view in one short paragraph, or leave out the less important detail.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple link words such as “However”, “Also”, and “For this reason” to show how your ideas are linked.
language and tone
Use a more formal phrase: write “attended an interview” instead of “gave interview”, and “at that hospital” instead of “at that premises”.
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You clearly say sorry and explain why you cannot take the job.
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You give a real reason for your choice: the other hospital is closer to your home.
coherence and cohesion
The greeting and closing are suitable for a formal letter.
coherence and cohesion
Your ideas are easy to follow because you use separate paragraphs for the main parts of the letter.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • gratitude
  • regret
  • unfortunately
  • opportunity
  • decision
  • career goals
  • personal circumstances
  • alignment
  • difficult choice
  • future opportunities
  • stay connected
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