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Is it better to have a small number of close friends or many friends.

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Introduction
Nowadays, a new topic has arisen in our society
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 is it better to have a small
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 of close
friends
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 or many
friends
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? I believe it is better to have a small
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 of close
friends
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 because of the responsibilities and duties involved.
Body paragraph 1
To begin
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 with, a small
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 of close
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 is more important for success than many
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.
This
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 is because you can divide your time and energy between each friend, and that reflects your progress.
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, if you hang out with one of them, you can build a more private relationship where you can share specific secrets.
This
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 builds stronger trust in difficult situations than having many
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Another important point is that it is easier to build trust and get the support you need with fewer
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.
In other words
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, statistics show that close
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 should be no more than five, and three is better.
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, a person with three
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 can focus on their performance in different areas of life,
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 as a manager, a representative, and a delegate.
Body paragraph 3
As a result
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, it helps them build strong bonds and improve their abilities.
Conclusion
In conclusion, having a small
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 of close
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 leads to a more organised life than having many
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Therefore
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, I believe that it is nice to communicate with others with a small
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 of
friends
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 for better success in life

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Make your main view more direct in the first part. Say that a few close friends are better because they give trust and help.
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Develop each main point more fully. Explain how close friends help in hard times, at work, or in daily life.
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Use real and clear examples. The example about a manager, a representative, and a delegate is hard to understand and does not clearly show friendship.
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Do not use "statistics show" unless you can explain the fact clearly. In this essay, it feels unsupported. A simple life example would be stronger.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, two main parts, and an end. Keep this shape, but make the link between ideas clearer.
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Put each main point in one full paragraph: state the point, explain it, give an example, and link it back to your view.
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Some sentences do not connect well to the point before them. For example, "that reflects your progress" is not clear. Say exactly what kind of progress you mean.
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Avoid very short paragraphs that repeat earlier ideas. The paragraph beginning "As a result" can be joined to the second main paragraph and explained more.
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You give a clear answer and keep the same view from the start to the end.
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You use two useful reasons: trust and support. These are good ideas for this topic.
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The essay uses clear signposts such as "To begin with", "Another important point", and "In conclusion".
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Your conclusion returns to your main view and gives the essay a clear ending.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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