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You want to sell some of your furniture. You think a friend of yours might like to buy it from you. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter explain why you are selling describe the furniture suggest a date when your friend can come and see the furniture

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Dear Ali, I’m writing to let you know about selling some of my
furniture
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 because I’m moving to a new home, and I’d like to replace it with new
furniture
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. So, I chose some of them for
selling
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. One piece of the
furniture
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 is the living room sofa because it takes up a significant amount of space in my new home. As you know, I purchased it from a prestigious brand, and I guarantee it can be a wise purchase. Another item is my TV, which is quite outdated, but it runs very well, and you can use it in your bedroom in order to watch movies
while
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 lying on the bed. What is your opinion about September 20, at 2 p.m.? I think it can be a convenient time, as we can go to the café after looking at the
furniture
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 and discuss prices, if you’d like to purchase some of them. Thanks for your time. If you have any questions, please feel free to reach out. Take care, Mohammadreza

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Say more about the sofa, such as its color, size, and age. This will help your friend decide if they want it.
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Make the sale clearer by saying which things are for sale. The TV is useful, but it is old, so give a simple price or ask if your friend is still interested.
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Use a warmer, more direct ending, for example: “Let me know if you can come on 20 September.”
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear order: why you are selling, what you are selling, and when to visit. Keep this plan.
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Use fewer long sentences. For example, split the first sentence into two short sentences for a clearer start.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear links between ideas. “Also” is better than “Another item” when you add the TV, and “After that” can link the visit to the café plan.
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You answer all the main parts: the reason for selling, the items, and a day and time to visit.
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The friendly plan to go to a café after the visit makes the letter feel personal.
coherence and cohesion
Each main idea is in its own paragraph, so the letter is easy to follow.
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The greeting and closing are friendly and fit a letter to a friend.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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