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the chart below shows the number of films produced by five countries in three years

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the chart below shows the number of films produced by five countries in three years
The bar chart illustrates the number of films created by five different countries in three consecutive
years
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.
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, the number of films produced in
B
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,
C
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 and E countries experienced a gradual increase over these three
years
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 period ,
while
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 A
country
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's production remained unchanged in two
years
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 and decreased slightly in the third
year
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. In 2007, the number of films
,
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apply
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 that were produced in
A
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Country A
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country
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 experienced the highest figure started with 90, about 9 times bigger than
Country
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Ecountry
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E
 during
this
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year
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. The next
year
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 A county stayed the same
while
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E
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the E
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country
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 slightly increased to approximately 12 in the 2008th
year
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. Meaningwhile A
country
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 can’t hold its position
and
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, and
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 it dropped to 80
while
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 E countru grow up to 14 in 2009. Turning to countries
B
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 and
C
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, they are witnesed gradual increase over three
years
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.
Country
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B
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 began at just under 50 production in 2007,
while
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Country
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C
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 started with 10 in the same
year
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. The next
year
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in
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, in
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 2008,
country
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B
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 rose slightly to 50 and
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also
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country C also
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country
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C
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 grew by just
two times more than
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twice as much as
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 the previous
year
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. In the
last
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year
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in
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,
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2009
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2009,
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 their figures climbed to 70 and 20
respectively
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, respectively
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, b, c, country, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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