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The maps below show the Riverside Park in 2010 and now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The maps below show the Riverside Park in 2010 and now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The maps show the transformation of the Riverside
park
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 from
the
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2010 until now.
Overall
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, the
park
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 has become more visitor-friendly and recreational with the advent of the Riverside
park
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 spaces and more facilities for
park
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-goers. In 2010, the
park
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 offered a limited number of facilities. Access to the cinema was from the south, with a large area of vegetation with trees on the left of the corner and the heritage railway on the other side of the map. The
park
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 was wrapped with a walking path, and inside it were three toilets for visitors. Two of them were on the north side of the walking path
and
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 the third was
in
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 the southwest side of the map. There was a river at the top of the Riverside
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park
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Park
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. Up until now, there
has
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 been significant shifts in the number of facilities. Starting from the middle of the
park
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, the toilets stood
unremaind
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unremarked
,
while
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 three swings
have
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 been added in the middle of the toilets. Parking remained intact, and the railway track has been added just behind the river.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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