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In Future, nobody will buy printed news papers or books because they will be able to ready anything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Introduction
It is predicted that the use of
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news
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newspapers
paper
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 will not
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exist
 for the upcoming years,
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instead
 it will
ve
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be
 over taken by
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non-payment
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service
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.
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while i
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 agree with stetement,
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 hold
the
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that the
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 printed form of
news
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 delivery will not
desipear
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disappear
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Body paragraph 1
The advancement of thechnology have had a
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profound
 impact
to
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 human life.
This
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 gave a new life for those who love reading with less cost,
everyone
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and everyone
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 can access their
news
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 from
internet
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the internet
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. The
forcast
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forecast
 for wifi is going to
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 and
unimagenable
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unimaginable
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Youtube
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,
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,
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 of the biggest
platform
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platforms
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 with a lot of
news
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 coverage.
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,
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 with the rise of AI, we are bound to see more ways to cover
news
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 information around the world.
Body paragraph 2
On the other hand
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,not everyone is excited to leave
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their
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Dispite
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Despite
 the importance, people still cling to
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news
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newspapers
paper
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. It holds a
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sentiment
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the
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life.
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, reading club creats apportunity to bond with others.
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, there is a lot of
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deception happening
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internet
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the internet
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However
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,
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paper
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newspaper articles
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news
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 usually
goes
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go
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 through an approval process before being published.
Conclusion
I
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 conclusion,
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because
 of the lies and
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description
that is
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happing
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happening
 online, people will not leave the
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paper base
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paper-based
news
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, with the enhancement of technology and easy access, more people will lean on online information in the future.

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task response
State your view more clearly in the first paragraph. You say you agree, but you also say printed news will not go away. Say how far you agree, for example: online news will be more common, but printed books and papers will still be bought by some people.
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Answer both parts of the idea: news papers and books. Your essay talks mainly about news. Add one main point about books, such as people who like paper books, gifts, school books, or books that do not need a screen.
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Make your reasons more direct. Free online news, fast updates, and easy use are good reasons. Explain why these reasons may make fewer people buy print.
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Your example about YouTube fits online news, but explain it more. Say that people can watch news at any time and often do not need to pay. Avoid saying all online news is free, because many news sites need payment.
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The point about false news is useful. Explain that trusted printed papers may have checks before they are sold, but also note that some online sources are trusted too. This will make your view more fair.
coherence and cohesion
Use a clear plan: introduction with your view; one paragraph on why online reading will grow; one paragraph on why print will stay; conclusion that repeats your view.
coherence and cohesion
Start each body paragraph with a clear main idea. For example: “Online news will grow because it is cheap and fast.” Then give an example and explain it.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words in a natural way. “For example”, “However”, and “In addition” are good, but make sure the next sentence fully supports the link.
coherence and cohesion
Keep the same words for key ideas. Use “printed newspapers”, “online news”, and “printed books” instead of changing to unclear forms such as “paper news” or “none payment service”.
coherence and cohesion
Check sentence order and full stops. Some ideas are hard to follow because the sentences are not complete or have many spelling errors. Short, clear sentences will help the reader follow your ideas.
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You give a clear two-sided view: online reading will grow, but printed news will not fully go away.
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You use relevant ideas, such as low cost, easy access, reading groups, and false news online.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, two main body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
You use helpful signposts such as “For instance”, “Furthermore”, “On the other hand”, and “In conclusion”.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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