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Many claim that the fast food industry had a negative impact on the environment ,eating habits and families. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction
Nowadays, the fast
food
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 industry has become a common part of people’s lives.
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, many people believe that it has negative effects on the
environment
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, eating habits and families. I completely agree with
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 view because fast
food
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 can harm the
environment
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 and encourage unhealthy lifestyles.
Body paragraph 1
One major negative impact of the fast
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 industry is its effect on the
environment
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. Fast
food
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 restaurants usually use a large amount of plastic packaging, cups and bags, which creates more waste.
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, producing and transporting large amounts of
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 can increase pollution.
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, many takeaway
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 come with several plastic containers that are used only once and
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 thrown away.
Body paragraph 2
Another problem is that fast
food
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 can negatively affect people’s eating habits and family life. Eating fast
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 regularly may encourage people to choose unhealthy
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 of fresh and nutritious
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. It can
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 reduce the amount of time families spend eating and preparing
meals
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 together.
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, a family that often orders fast
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 may spend less time cooking and having
meals
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 together at home.
Conclusion
In conclusion, I strongly agree that the fast
food
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 industry has negative effects on the
environment
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, eating habits and families.
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, people should try to reduce their dependence on fast
food
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 and choose healthier alternatives.

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task response
Your view is clear from the start, and you answer all three parts: the earth, food habits, and family life. To make the answer stronger, give more detail about each part. For example, say how farms for meat may use much land and water, or how fast food can lead to too much salt, fat, and sugar.
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The point about family life is good, but it is quite short. Explain more fully why less cooking and less time at the table can harm family ties. You could also add that some busy parents may find fast food useful, then say why its bad sides are still greater.
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Your examples fit your main points. Make them more real and exact. Instead of only saying that plastic is thrown away, explain that it can end up in rivers or the sea and hurt animals.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear shape: an opening, two main parts, and an ending. Each main part has one main idea, so it is easy to read.
coherence and cohesion
Use a wider range of links between ideas. You use “For example”, “In addition”, and “Therefore” well. You can also use “As a result”, “This means that”, and “On top of this” to show how one idea leads to the next.
coherence and cohesion
Make the link between eating habits and family life smoother. These are two different ideas in one paragraph. You could give each idea its own paragraph, or add a clear line such as “Fast food also changes the way families eat together.”
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Your main view is clear: you fully agree that fast food has bad effects. You stay on the topic from start to end.
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The examples of single-use plastic and families ordering food are relevant and easy to understand.
coherence and cohesion
The opening tells the reader what you will discuss, and the ending clearly restates your view.
coherence and cohesion
Your ideas are in a sensible order, with the earth first and people and families next.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental pollution
  • packaging waste
  • high energy consumption
  • convenience
  • marketing strategies
  • unhealthy eating habits
  • high consumption of fats
  • processed foods
  • family dynamics
  • home-cooked meals
  • healthier options
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