You share your room with another student in the college hostel. You find it very difficult to study there because he or She always has parties and friends visiting. write a letter to the hostel warden complaining about your displeasure with the roommate.

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Dear Mrs Lockyer, I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with my roommate, Nancy. She is a third-year student in IT Business Technology. She loves partying and always has her friends visiting our place , because of that, there is a lot of distraction
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I cannot focus on my studies or do any other chores in the area.
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, you would not believe what happened
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night
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I cleaned the entire room and planned to study at night , but she invited her friends and hung out at our place the whole night , which did not leave a chance to study at all. To top it all off, her friends turned our area into a ballroom , and the music was unbearable. They
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untidied the room and threw up in our bathroom , which clogged when they left. I would really appreciate it if you could help me by allocating another room, so I could focus on my studies as exams are around the corner. Yours sincerely, Maheep Kaur

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task response
Explain more clearly what you want the warden to do. Ask for a room change, and also ask the warden to speak to Nancy or set rules for visitors and noise.
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Keep the tone polite and formal. Do not use words such as “ballroom” or “threw up” in a letter to the warden. Say that the visitors made a lot of noise and left the room and bathroom very dirty.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear start, main part, and end. To make it flow better, use simple links such as “As a result”, “In addition”, and “Therefore” between your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Keep each paragraph focused on one point: the study problem, the event last night, the mess, and your request. This will make the letter easier to read.
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You clearly explain the main problem: noise and visitors stop you from studying. You also give a real example and make a clear request for help.
coherence and cohesion
The letter is well organised. It has a proper greeting, clear paragraphs, and a suitable closing.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • formal complaint
  • roommate
  • hostel warden
  • study in peace
  • loud parties
  • friends visiting
  • make noise
  • disturb my studies
  • late at night
  • coming in and out
  • lack of sleep
  • unable to focus
  • politely requested
  • no improvement
  • take action
  • solve the problem
  • change rooms
  • follow hostel rules
  • quiet environment
  • I would be grateful
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