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Some people think that hosting an international sports event is good for the country, while some people think it is bad. Discuss both views and state your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Introduction
Some individuals believe that hosting an international sporting event in the
country
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 is beneficial because it helps generate revenue.
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, others hold a different opinion about that. They believe that organising
such
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events
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increase
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increases
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 the financial burden on the government, and
as a
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result
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result,
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 local people may face several challenges. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss both views
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 and explain why I believe that international
events
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 are more advantageous than their drawbacks.
Body paragraph 1
On the one hand, international sports
events
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 help to generate
the
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revenue
,
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 and boost
the
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tourism in the
country
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. When people hear about the big
events
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,
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then
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 they
booked
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 their tickets in advance, spend money on luxurious hotels, and buy souvenirs as well.
Consequently
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, tourism helps to generate new employment opportunities in different sectors, which automatically improves the economic situation of that
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.
Moreover
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, official authorities
also
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 improve the infrastructure of the
country
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 by building new lanes, roads,
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stadiums
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and stadiums
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 to attract more audience.
For instance
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, when the Olympic
games
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 were held in Barcelona, the
events
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 improved the
overall
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 image of the
country
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.
Body paragraph 2
On the other hand
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, countries that host these major
events
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 have to invest a huge amount of money on it. They need to spend heavily on building new
stadiums
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, arranging security for international visitors, and upgrading the transportation system. Because of that, the government take loans from banks, which not only
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 the financial burden on them, but
also
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make
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makes
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 the
country
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 economically weaker.
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, people may face food scarcity, unemployment, and poverty
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 when these
events
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 become unsuccessful. Apart from that, newly built
stadiums
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 need repairs and maintenance on time, but once the event is over
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,
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then
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 nobody
look
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looks
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 after them. The same happened in Brazil, where thousands of
stadiums
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left
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were left
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 abandoned, and eventually they turned into jungles
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 negligence.
Conclusion
In conclusion,
although
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 hosting international sporting
events
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 can create financial pressure, I believe the benefits
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such
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 as increased tourism
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and
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 improved
infrastructure
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infrastructure,
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 outweigh the drawbacks. With proper planning and responsible spending, countries can enjoy long‑term advantages from these
events
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.

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task response
You discuss both sides and give a clear view. To make your answer stronger, explain more clearly why the good points are more important than the costs. For example, say how new roads or jobs can still help people many years after the event.
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Some claims are too broad. Food scarcity and poverty may happen in some cases, but they do not always come from one sports event. Use more careful words such as “may” and explain the link.
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Check the Brazil example. “Thousands of stadiums” seems unlikely and may make the reader doubt the point. Use one clear, well-known example, or give a less exact claim.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear order: introduction, good side, bad side, and conclusion. This makes it easy to follow.
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Use linking words with care. Some sentences have too many ideas joined by commas. Split them into shorter sentences so each point is clear.
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Keep the same form in lists. For example, write “build new roads, lanes, and stadiums” rather than mixing different forms.
coherence and cohesion
Make the move from each example back to your main point more direct. After Barcelona, state exactly how the event helped the country. After Brazil, state exactly how unused places caused extra costs.
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You answer every part of the question: you show both views and state your own view clearly.
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The main ideas are on topic, including tourism, jobs, roads, costs, safety, and unused stadiums.
coherence and cohesion
Each body paragraph has one main side of the discussion, so the reader can follow your ideas easily.
coherence and cohesion
The conclusion clearly repeats your view and gives a useful condition: good planning and careful use of money.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic boost
  • infrastructure
  • national pride
  • cultural showcase
  • inspire a generation
  • temporary boost
  • environmental concerns
  • sustainable planning
  • public funds
  • divert resources
  • tourism influx
  • job opportunities
  • sports development
  • public health
  • construction
  • strategic investment
  • global audience
  • hospitality
  • public services
  • cost-benefit analysis
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