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You went to another city for a training course and stayed at a friend’s house for a week. They have been great hosts. Write a letter to your friend In your letter, thank them for having you at their house for a week express your gratitude for their hospitality say how much you miss them

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Dear Ali, I'm writing to thank you for your kindness and the time you allowed me to stay at your home, which was an enjoyable experience for me. I'd
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 like to express my gratitude for your hospitality, particularly the dishes your wife provided, which were really delicious. I'd
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 appreciate your help regarding taking me to the course place
everyday
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, I'd love the
moment we spent time
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 together in the countryside, which created memorable and enjoyable moments. I truly
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miss you, as the moments we spent made me relaxed and energetic.
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, I cannot forget your
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 kindness
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 providing traditional delicious dishes. Thank you again for everything. I hope to see you again as soon as possible. Take care, Mohammadreza

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task response
You answer all parts of the letter. Add one or two small details about the week to make your thanks feel more real and warm.
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Use more natural thanks, such as “Thank you for letting me stay with you” and “I really miss you both.”
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear start, middle, and end. Keep each paragraph on one main point: thanks, help during the week, then how much you miss them.
coherence and cohesion
Some lines are not natural. Write “I miss you very much,” not “I truly feel miss you.” Write “your wife’s kindness,” not “your wife kindness.”
coherence and cohesion
Do not use “I’d love” for a past time. Say “I loved the time we spent together in the countryside.”
task response
You thank your friend, talk about the kind help from the family, and say that you miss them.
coherence and cohesion
The greeting and closing are warm and fit a letter to a friend. The ideas move in a clear order.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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