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The diagram below shows a small local museum and its surroundings in 1957 and 2007.

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The map illustrates how the structure of a small local
museum
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 changed from 1957 to 2007.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 there were several significant changes to the structure of the
museum
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. It is
also
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 worth mentioning that the
road
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 remained more or less unchanged over the given period. In 1957, the local
museum
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 was surrounded by a garden. There is a
road
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 at the bottom of the layout, which runs from west to east. And the
museum
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 can be reached through a pathway, which is connected with
road
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. The local history room occupied the bottom-left corner of the layout, which was an adjustment to the
museum
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 storeroom.
Whereas
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, the national history exhibition was situated on the north side of the
museum
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, which was in front of the entrance hall. Turning to 2007, the garden was reduced in size in order to expand the
museum
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 area. Meanwhile, the pathway was demolished to make way for the car park. The local history room was removed to the centre of the
museum
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 in order to build new facilities,
such
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 as a
museum
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 shop and reception. Whilst the
museum
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 store room was destroyed to make place for the cafe. New facilities were added to the upper part of the layout,
such
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 as special exhibitions and an education centre.
Although
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such
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 changes happened, the
road
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 stayed unchanged throughout the given period.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words museum, road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • renovation
  • architectural trends
  • landscaping
  • infrastructure
  • civic development
  • cultural hub
  • heritage conservation
  • urban planning
  • visitor amenities
  • sustainability efforts
  • technological integration
  • aesthetic appeal
  • community engagement
  • accessibility improvements
  • pedestrian-friendly
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