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Global warming is one of the biggest threat to our environment. What causes global warming? What solutions are there to solve this problem

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Introduction
The issue of global warming
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that is
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 one of the biggest
threat
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threats
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 to our
environment
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environment,
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 has become a significant concern in recent years.It is widely believed that
the
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apply
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global warming is the most
threat
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threatening
 issue
on
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to
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people life
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people's lives
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.
This
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 essay explores the causes of
this
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 problem and suggests possible solutions.
Body paragraph 1
One major cause is that rising the temeprtures,which affect
people
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 and animals.
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,if the weather is too hot,many
people
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 and animals might die .Another factor is that
extrem
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extreme
 weather ,which might cause floods .
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,if a flood
accure
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occurs
 in some countries,the flood will
destory
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destroy
 the
bulidings
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buildings
,forests ,and beachs and many
people
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 might lose their life and the animals might become extinct.
Body paragraph 2
One solution is that
people
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 can reduce useing the fossil fuels and
energy
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 consumption,which would help by reducing occure the
global
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occurrence of global
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 warming .Another solution is that
people
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 should use renewable
energy
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 ,
such
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 as the sun and
winds
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wind
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.
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,if a girl wants to see a light
at
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in
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 her room ,she can open the window to see
hir
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her
 room by the sun ,which is better than
turn
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turning
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 on all light of her house because the light
work
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works
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 by
energy
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.
Conclusion
To sum up
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,
the
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apply
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 global warming is a pressing issue.By adopting
to
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the
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 use
renewable
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of renewable
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energy
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 and
to reduce using
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reducing
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 the fossil fuels and
energy
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 consumption,we can address the root causes and work towards a better outcome.

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task response
Answer both parts with more clear detail. The essay names causes and solutions, but some points are not fully explained. For example, say why fossil fuels make the Earth warmer: they put more gas into the air and keep heat in.
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Make sure the causes are real causes, not results. Rising heat, floods, and deaths are results of global warming. Write about causes such as cars, factories, burning coal and oil, and cutting down forests.
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Use stronger examples. The example about opening a window does not show how renewable energy works. You could write about homes using solar panels or cities using wind power.
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Keep each main idea clear. Explain one cause or one solution, then add a short example or result. This will make your ideas easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, two body parts, and an ending. Keep this plan, but make the links between ideas smoother.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple link words correctly: “First,” “Also,” “For example,” “As a result,” and “In conclusion.” Do not start many sentences with “For example” unless you give a real example.
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Write shorter sentences. Some sentences have too many ideas and become hard to understand. For instance, split the flood sentence into two or three sentences.
coherence and cohesion
Avoid repeating the same words, such as “global warming” and “people.” You can use “this problem,” “the Earth,” “humans,” or “animals” when the meaning is clear.
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You answer both questions by giving causes and solutions.
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You include ideas about fossil fuels and renewable energy, which are useful for this topic.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
You try to use link words such as “For example,” “Another factor,” and “To sum up.”
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global warming
  • environmental degradation
  • climate change
  • greenhouse effect
  • carbon dioxide
  • methane
  • emissions
  • fossil fuels
  • deforestation
  • industrialization
  • livestock farming
  • population growth
  • waste management
  • volcanic eruptions
  • polar ice caps
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