The chart below shows the number of adults participating in different major sports in one area, in 1997 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The provided bar chart illustrates the changes in the number of adults measured with thousands participating in seven different major sports in a specific country between 1997 and 2017.
Overall
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, all sports showed a noticable increasing in the number of participants, except cricket experienced
declining
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a decline
. It is
also
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worth mentioning that tennis was the most popular sport among the others.
To begin
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with, tennis took the lead in 1997 and 2017
recording
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50
thousand
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and 55
thousand
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participant
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participants
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respectively. Football and rugby were almost
similer
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similar
in
regurding
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terms
of the number of athletes
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slightly above 30
thousand
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in 1997 and a little under 50
thousand
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in 2017.
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, basketball
growen
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grew
from 9
thousand
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participant
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participants
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to 22
thousand
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during those 20
yours
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years
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. Swimming remained unchanged at 35
thousand
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participant
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participants
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.
In
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contrast
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contrast,
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cricket experienced a drop in participants from 25
thousand
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in 1997 to 8
thousand
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in 2017.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • participation rate
  • increase/decrease in numbers
  • trend
  • decade
  • relatively stable
  • major sports
  • potential reasons
  • contributing factors
  • public interest
  • comparison
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