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The table below shows the waste production in 6 different countries over a twenty year period,

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The table below shows the waste production in 6 different countries over a twenty year period,
The table illustrates the
production
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 of
waste
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 in six countries,
Ireland
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,
Japan
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,
Korea
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,
Poland
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, Portugal and
The
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 US, between the years 1980 and 2000.
Overall
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, the US had more
wast
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waste
 than other countries,
while
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 Portugal was the lowest country
produce
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to produce
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 it. First in 1980, the US was
top
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the top
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 country who produce
waste
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 131,
also
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Japan
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 was the second in
waste
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production
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 28,
while
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Ireland
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 and Portugal
were produce
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produced
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 0.6 and 4
respictevelly
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respectively
. But
Korea
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 had no
waste
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 to produce in that year. Second in 1990, the US was
also
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 in the lead (151)
and
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, and
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Japan
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 and
Korea
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 were next to the US (32 and 31
respictevelly
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respectively
).
Moreover
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, the
waste
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 of Portugal was
to
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too
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 low (3) and
Poland
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also
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 (5). In
addtion
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addition
,
Ireland
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 did not produce any
waste
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 in that year. Third in 2000, the highest country was the US
192
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, 192
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, which
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which
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which,
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 if compine all
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waste
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the waste
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 of other countries will not equal
to
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apply
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the
US, the
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US. The
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production
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 of
Japan
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 increased
signifficantly
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significantly
 in
this
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 year
53
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, 53
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,
whereas
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Protugal
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Portugal
 and
Poland
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 increased slightly ( 5 for Portugal and 6.6 for
Poland
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).
Korea
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 reduced the
wast
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waste
production
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 in 2000
which
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, which
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 was 19. In
addtion
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addition
,
Ireland
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 productuon reach to 5.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, waste, ireland, japan, korea, poland with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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