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The table displays trends concerning the amounts of fast food consumed in Melbourne.

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The table displays trends concerning the amounts of fast food consumed in Melbourne.
The table
illustrate
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illustrates
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 the amount of different type fast food ,
hamburger
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, fried
chicken
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,
salad
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,
fied
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fried
 rice and
nooles
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noodles
, eaten in
Melbournre
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Melbourne
, between the years 2005 and 2025
Overall
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, the
hambuger
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hamburger
 was the most popular type of fast food consumed in Melbourne, but
noodles
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 had less consumption.
To begin
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 with, in 2005 the consumption of
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hamburger
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hamburgers
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 was high
40
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at 40
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,
while
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fried
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that of fried
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chicken
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 was less than
hamburger
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 about 5
units
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. The
number
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 of both fired rice and
noodles
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 was equal
6
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to 6
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units
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,
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;
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moreover
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moreover,
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salad
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 was less
popularity
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popular
 in 2005 , only 5
units
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. In
addtion
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addition
,
The
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the
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number
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 of
fied
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fried
chicken
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 was
to
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too
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 close to the
number
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 of
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hamburger
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hamburgers
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 in present ( 38 and 37
respictevelly
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respectively
). The
number
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 of
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salad
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salads
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 just overtook fried
chicken
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 and
noodles
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 in the present ( 15 ),
whereas
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 fried
chicken
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 and
noddles
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noodles
 increased slightly ( 9 and 8
respictevelly
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respectively
). In the year 2025, the
number
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 of people who consumed
salad
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 increased
signiffically
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significantly
 ( 41
units
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). The consumption of
noodles
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 and
salad
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are
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is
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 equal
in
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apply
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this
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 year, but fried
chicken
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 and
hamburger
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had
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have had
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counumption
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consumption
 all the time ( 45 and 51 in that order)

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hamburger, chicken, salad, noodles, units, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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