In some countries, people are having children at later age in life . What are the reasons? Do the advantages outweigh disadvantages?

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Introduction
These days
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people
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prefer to have children at a later age in their life because they prioritise their career and
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make sure that they can provide their kids with financial support for the best possible life.
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, the rate of infertility is getting higher , and countries are facing major issues like depopulation and a shorter labour force. I believe that the disadvantages are much more concerning than the advantages in
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scenario.
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with, the advantages of having kids at a later stage of life give an individual an opportunity of pursuing their interests freely without any family.
People
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tend to move abroad for their education, jobs and hobbies , but having responsibilities of children and family might hold them to achieve what they really want.
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, a person with no family ties can move easily from one place to another for better oppertunity but it is significantly more difficult for a married couple. On top of it, it's no longer easy to raise a child in
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economy of high inflation and expenditures. They don't have a garden to grow their own food or fields to pasture their own animals, like their ancestors used to do. Young
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live in apartments where they have to pay for every single service, which
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to a lot of expenses and makes it nearly impossible to raise kids unless they are well earned.
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, there are many disadvantages as well for late marriages. The couple might have to face the consequences of not conceiving a baby without any medical intervention after a certain age. Take an example of the increasing number of IVF centres being opened and running in
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recent years.
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end up having only one child in most of the cases when they plan a baby after their thirties.
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, a number of Western countries are facing a problem of decreasing population and a shortening of the youth, which puts financial stress on providing services to the increasing older generation. That's
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a reason for inviting
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from developing countries to developed nations to meet
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labour demand and tax-paying citizens.
Conclusion
In conclusion,
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postponing parenthood allows individuals the freedom to achieve personal and financial goals in a challenging economy, the consequences cannot be ignored. The widespread biological difficulties in conceiving and the severe economic strain a shrinking youth population places on a nation demonstrate that the disadvantages of
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trend ultimately outweigh the advantages.

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task response
You answer both parts of the question: you give reasons for later parenthood and say that the bad points are stronger. Make your main reasons more direct in the first body paragraph. Career goals and the high cost of raising children are clear reasons, but moving abroad and living in apartments are only parts of those reasons.
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Explain more clearly why each point matters. For example, say how more study, better jobs, and more savings can help parents give children a safer home. Then explain why lower birth rates can lead to fewer workers and more cost for the state.
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Your examples are linked to the topic, but some need more care. The rise in IVF places does not by itself prove that people have trouble having children. Use a more direct example, such as a couple who wait until their late thirties and need more help to have a child.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear order: introduction, good points, bad points, and conclusion. This makes it easy to follow. Keep this structure in future essays.
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Make the first body paragraph more focused. It starts with freedom, then moves to travel, then money, food, and housing. Split it into two clear ideas: personal goals and financial safety. Give each idea its own short explanation.
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Use linking words with care. Phrases such as “To begin with”, “On the other hand”, and “Moreover” help the reader. However, “On top of it” is less clear here. Use “In addition” or “Another reason is” instead.
coherence and cohesion
Some long sentences carry too many ideas. Break them into shorter sentences so the link between cause and result is clear. This will make your writing smoother and easier to read.
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Your position is clear from the introduction to the conclusion: you believe the bad points are stronger.
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You include useful ideas on both sides, such as career plans, money, health problems, fewer young workers, and an older population.
coherence and cohesion
The conclusion brings together your main points and gives a clear final answer to the question.
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Most paragraphs have a clear main purpose, and the use of examples helps move your ideas forward.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • deferred parenting
  • career trajectory
  • academic pursuits
  • contraception efficacy
  • societal paradigm shift
  • financial solvency
  • emotional maturity
  • parental responsibility
  • demographic trends
  • fertility rates
  • gestational risks
  • intergenerational communication
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