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The charts below give information about USA marriage and divorce rates between 1970 and 2000, and the marital status of adult Americans in two of the years.

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The charts below give information about USA marriage and divorce rates between 1970 and 2000, and the marital status of adult Americans in two of the years.
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 the information regarding the USA marriage and divorce ratio from 1997 to 2000,
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 the marital status of adult Americans in two of the years.
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, it can be seen that the merger percentage was higher in the years 1970 and 1980.
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 the separation
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 was higher in the year 1980. On top of that, the marital status of Americans has the highest number of marriages and lower in divorcerate. After analysing the graph, it is abundantly clear that, in 1970 , in the USA, the marriage
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 dropped rapidly.
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, the divorce
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 shows a constant
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 throughout the period, except in 1980, with show slightly upward trend.
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, in America, never-married adults shared 15% contribution in 1970, and 20% in 2000, respectively.
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, marriage held the highest position in comparison with others,
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% in 1970 and 60% in 2000, respectively. Apart from that, widows showed a low percentage with 8% in 1970
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 and 7% in 2000.
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, the least was shown in the divorced case , which is 3% in 1970 and 9% in 2000.

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