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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement? *Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.*

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Introduction
There is
practical
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a practical
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 problem for someone to speak a foreign language in the country where they live. In my humble opinion,
It's
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 True.
Body paragraph 1
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Language
 barrier is the main problem
to
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for
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 someone to
able
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be able
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understanding
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to understand
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 all things in general.
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, I have been going to a place called Ngawi, Java is the mother
tounge
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 language there. I remember
order
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ordering
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 some food using Bahasa Indonesia and
suprisingly
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surprisingly
 she
cannot
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couldn't
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 understand what
i'm
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saying
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saying,
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 even the worst part
is
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 she
bring
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 the wrong food.
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But
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can be not
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 true, because it depends on the person,
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whether he is
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 very
ambisius
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ambitious
 with language or not. If
somone
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someone
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, the social and practical problems can
dissapere
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disappear
,
Conclusion
In the end,
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 not always about the
languange
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language
 itself, we can still communicate through another
languange
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language
 like mimik word than can
easily
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be easily
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more understandable
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understood
, and of
course
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course,
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 we already have a technology called
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Google
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. We just
us
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 it and all the problems
suddenly
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are suddenly
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 gone.

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Give a clear answer in the first part: say if you agree, disagree, or partly agree. Your view changes in the essay: first you say the idea is true, but later you say it may not be true. Explain your final view clearly.
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Write more about both parts of the question. Explain social problems, such as making friends, joining work groups, or feeling alone. Also explain practical problems, such as food, travel, school, health care, or work.
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Develop each main point. After each idea, say why it happens and what result it has. Do not say that all problems are suddenly gone with Google, because this is too strong and not fully true.
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Your example about ordering food is useful. Make it clearer by showing the problem, the result, and why it supports your view. You could also add one example about a social problem.
coherence and cohesion
Use a clear four-part plan: introduction, one paragraph on social problems, one paragraph on practical problems, and a conclusion. This will help the reader follow your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Start each body paragraph with one clear main idea. For example: “First, a language barrier can make social life hard.” Then give an example and explain it.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple linking words to show the order of ideas: “First”, “For example”, “As a result”, “However”, and “In conclusion”. Make sure “however” is used only when you show a real opposite idea.
coherence and cohesion
Some sentences are hard to follow because the words are not in a clear order. Keep sentences short and direct. For example, write: “A language barrier makes daily life difficult.”
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You give a clear real-life example about ordering food, and it is linked to daily practical problems.
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You try to show that personal effort to learn a language can reduce problems. This is a useful idea.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a beginning, body ideas, and an ending.
coherence and cohesion
You use examples and words such as “For example” and “In the end” to guide the reader.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Communication barriers
  • Misunderstandings
  • Expressing needs
  • Emotions
  • Language proficiency
  • Integration
  • Local community
  • Culture
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