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📊 The graph below describes the use of fixed telephone lines, mobile phones, and internet between 1994 and 2005 in China. 📝

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📊 The graph below describes the use of fixed telephone lines, mobile phones, and internet between 1994 and 2005 in China. 📝
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provide
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provides
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 key information about three
type
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types
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 of communication
which
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, which
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is
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are
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 telephone lines, mobile phone and
internet
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the internet
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in
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, in
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 priod 1994
and
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to
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 2005 in
china
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China
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.
Overall
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, it's clear from
graph
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the graph
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 that rapidly
increseaing
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increasing
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user
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users
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 of mobile
phone
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phones
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,
in
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addition
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addition,
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 fixed telephone lines are in growth correctly ,
whereas
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internet
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the internet
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 is decline through years.
Accourding
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According
 to what is shown ,
mobile
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the mobile
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 phone has
domnated
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dominated
 all other
categorys
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categories
due to
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 people
has
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having
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 to deal with it
timely
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apply
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since 1994s up to 450 million
user
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users
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, and has more advantage which is easy to access side to side with
fixid
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fixed
 telephone lines
which
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, which
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 can
used
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be used
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 by
old
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the old
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 . In terms of
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the internet
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internet
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internet,
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 its decline and not doing much by
mantine
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maintaining
 to almost 250 million in 2005
and
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 that
becouse
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because
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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