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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a paricular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017

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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a paricular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017
the
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 line graph illustrates the
number
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 of
tourists
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 over 7 years and
diffirentates
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differentiates
 between the
travelers
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travellers
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 who stayed on the
island
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 and who came
in
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on
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 a cruise ship
overall
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 the
number
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 of
tourists
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 was growing gradually until
2016
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2016,
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 it rose
dramaticaly
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dramatically
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so
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. So,
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 the numbers hit their peak
at
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in
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 2017
,
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. On
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on the other
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hand
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hand,
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 cruise ships were not common until
2015
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2015,
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 when they surpassed
tourists
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 who stayed on
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island
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the island
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. However,
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however
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 between 2013 and
2015
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2015,
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 the
number
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 of
travelers
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travellers
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 on
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island
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the island
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 remained stable and started falling in 2015
in
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conclusion
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conclusion,
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 the
number
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 of
tourists
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 went up from 1 million in 2010 to 3.5 million in 2017
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. Moreover,
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moreover
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 the highest visit in
cruise
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a cruise
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 ship was in 2017
taking
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, taking
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 over the
number
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 of visitors staying on
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island
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the island
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 by 2 million.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, tourists, island with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
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