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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a paricular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017

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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a paricular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017
the
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The
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 line graph illustrates the
statics
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statistics
 of
tourists
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 visiting an
island
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on
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in
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 the
caribbean
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Caribbean
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 from 2010 to 2017
and
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, and
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 it
differentates
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differentiates
 between visitors who came on a
cruise
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 ship and who stayed on the
island
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overall
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 the number of
travelers
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travellers
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 increased gradually
and
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, and
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cruise
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 ships were not common until later. inicially
tourists
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perfered
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preferred
 to stay on the
island
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 until 2015
visitors
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. Visitors
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 on
cruise
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 ships surpassed
tourists
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 on the
island
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more over
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. Moreover,
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 from 2015 to
2016
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2016,
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 the
amount
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number
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 of visitors
remaind
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remained
 stable
and
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, and
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in
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apply
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in 2017 it
incresed
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increased
 and hit its peak.
in
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In
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conclusion
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conclusion,
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 the highest amount of
tourists
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is
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was
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 in 2017 at
total
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a total
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 amount of 3.5
million
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million,
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 where
to
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apply
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2 million are on
cruise
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 ships
and
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, and
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 1.5
are
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million are
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 staying on
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island
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the island
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists, island, cruise with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
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