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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a paricular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017

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The given line graph
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illustrates information
 about the number of sightseers visiting a specific Caribbean island from 2010 to 2017. The data has been calibrated in millions.
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, it can be clearly seen that the number of visitors staying trend
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increased in all category thourghout the period.
To begin
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 with, in 2010, the total
visitors
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number of visitors
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 was 1
million
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and
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 it rose sharply
about
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 3
million
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 from 2011 to 2017.
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, the
count
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number
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 of visitors
stayed
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staying
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 on
island
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the island
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about
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was about
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 0.7
million
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.
However
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, it
also
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inclined
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declined
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 around 1.5
milion
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million
 from 2011 to 2013. After
that
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 it
was
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remained stable during the period. Moving
further
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, in
2010
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2010,
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 the number of tourists who
perffered
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preferred
 to stay on cruise ships
about
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was about
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 0.2
million
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. It was the fluctuated trend till 2013. But it was gradually increased
about
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by about
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 2
million
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 from 2013 to 2017 orderly.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
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