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Some people feel that the primary function of a university should be to prepare students for the working world. Others argue that the purpose of a university education is to provide knowledge for knowledge’s sake. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Introduction
In today's world,
University
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 education has become an important topic of discussion. Some people argue that a basic responsibility of
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 institutions is to make them ready for
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 environment,
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 others believe that the motive of
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University
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a university
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 is to dispense understanding and comprehension.
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 essay will discuss both views before explaining why
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 believe that the
University
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 student should be aware of
work
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 tasks throughout higher education.
Body paragraph 1
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 the one hand, Universities teach students important lessons which can help them to deal with real life experience.
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, lectures help future graduates to
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understand
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 job tasks by presenting
real life
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real-life
 problems.
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 is because certain professions require specific qualifications and professional registration before people can
work
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 in that field.
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, doctors must complete a medical degree and undertake hospital placements before they can practise independently.
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, obtaining a degree
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 practical
knowledge
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 is extremely important for students who want to
work
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 in the real world
Body paragraph 2
One
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 the other hand,
University
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 education
provide
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knowledge
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 for
knowledge
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's sake
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, who
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 enrolled
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 courses to be aware of history, philosophy,
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and mathematics
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 by presenting more
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theoretical
 lessons.
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,
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knowledge
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man
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 not always
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 directly to a particular career, but it can help individuals become more informed and responsible citizens.
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, people may choose to study a subject simply because they are passionate about it, rather than because it offers immediate job opportunities.
Conclusion
In my opinion, Universities should balance both purposes. They should provide students with
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 academic pathway
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 offering practical skills,
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 placements, and career
guidence
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guidance
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 would allow graduates to find employment
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 continuing to learn and contribute positively to society.

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task response
You discuss both views and give your own view clearly. To make your answer stronger, explain more fully why learning for its own sake is useful. For example, say how history or philosophy can help people think well and make good choices.
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Your example about doctors is clear and fits the work view well. Add one clear example for the other view, such as a person who studies history because it helps them understand people and society.
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Make your own view more direct. You say universities should balance both aims, but you can state which aim should come first, or explain why both should have the same place.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear order: introduction, first view, second view, and your view. This makes it easy to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear link words carefully. You use “In other words” many times, but some of these ideas are not the same idea in new words. Use “For example”, “Also”, “However”, or “As a result” when they show the link more clearly.
coherence and cohesion
Start each body part with a clear main idea. For example: “Universities should prepare students for work because many jobs need special skills.” Then explain and give an example.
coherence and cohesion
Check small word and sentence errors because they can make meaning less clear. For example, write “On the one hand”, “On the other hand”, “universities provide”, “theoretical”, and “career guidance”.
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You answer every part of the question: you explain the work aim, the learning aim, and your own opinion.
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The doctor example is useful because it clearly shows why some university courses need both study and real work practice.
coherence and cohesion
The four-part essay plan is clear, and the last part gives a suitable ending.
coherence and cohesion
You use some helpful linking words, such as “For example”, “As a result”, and “In addition”.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • internships
  • practical experience
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