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The graph below shows the amount of UK investments in clean energy from 2008 to 2015.

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The graph below shows the amount of UK investments in clean energy from 2008 to 2015.
The given bar chart illustrates the
figure
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amount
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 of money spent on
energy
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 infrastructure between 2008
to
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and
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 2015 in the United Kingdom.
Overall
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,
higher
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a higher
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 amount was allocated in
wind
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the wind
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energy
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 sector as the lower cash
utilized
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was utilised
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 in
energy
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 smart technologies.
While
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 insignificant money is kept for other
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energy producing
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energy-producing
 facilities. In detail, 3
billion
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 budget
consumed
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was consumed
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 in other
sector
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sectors
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 for clean
energy
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 in 2008.
However
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, the budget increased significantly in 2009 accounted for 6
billion
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.
Whereas
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,
investment
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 remained constant for
few
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a few
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 years and
then
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 went up slightly
about to
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to about
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 eight
billion
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 in 2014.
Moreover
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,
investment
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 in
wind
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the wind
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 industry was about 2
billion
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 in 2008 as the trend continued to grow and hit a
highest
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high
 point of 13
billion
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 in 2015. As for other plants,
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energy
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the energy
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 department in
UK
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the UK
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 spent
little
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a small
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 amount
in
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on
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energy
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 smart technologies
as
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,
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 around
to
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apply
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1
billion
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 in 2008.
Investment
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grow
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grew
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 gradually in
2009
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2009,
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comprised of
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reaching
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 7
billion
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. As there is an upward trend in
investment
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 in smart technologies across all years.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, billion, investment with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • clean energy investment
  • investment in renewable energy
  • the amount invested
  • a general upward trend
  • a downward trend
  • a fluctuating pattern
  • reach a peak
  • hit a low point
  • rise steadily
  • increase sharply
  • grow gradually
  • fall significantly
  • decline slightly
  • remain relatively stable
  • fluctuate between
  • stand at
  • end the period at
  • compared with
  • respectively
  • an overall increase
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